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shagirl
Junior Member
since 2000-03-20
Posts 18
southbeach, usa.

0 posted 2000-03-20 04:11 PM


THE LOST ONE

Do you remember a child of eight,
one who smiled freely and had a heart,
full of love and trust?

Can you tell me who ,
this child is within the pictures,
you have laid before me?

I find I need to ask him,
what he is smiling about?

Do you notice the sparkle in his eyes ?
I wonder where he found it ?
For I can never remember having it.

When I look into the mirror,
my eyes are flat , dull
and dead.

Tell me how you have found,
a child like this in our world.
How is it that he has not yet ,
become corrupted by the system,
you claim works.

This cannot be true,what you have said,
That this child once lived within my head.

Tell me more I would like to see,
How you claim this child could ,
have once been me!


© Copyright 2000 shagirl - All Rights Reserved
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
1 posted 2000-03-20 04:15 PM


very very good  ... feel this way all the time looking back at old pictures  nice job

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



Aiden Kelly
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
2 posted 2000-03-20 04:19 PM


wow!  that's so true!!! lost innocence is such a part of life....oh how i wish it wasn't.  you have written this with such honesty and sincerity...i can feel how amazed you are and how torn you are over the truth and the yearning to be innocent again...great poem!!!  
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-20 08:49 PM


this is excellent writing... you have expressed your pains reflections so well in this, very good work
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-03-20 11:27 PM


Welcome to the dark forum,  sad musings here about innocense lost.  So sad.  Well written, great work.  Hope to see more  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-03-21 12:11 PM


Excellent poem.  I think we all feel that way about ourselves at one time or anoher.  Looking forward to seeing more of your work.  Welcome to passions!!  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
6 posted 2000-03-21 12:16 PM


very nice. memories are full of sadness and wonder. great expression of these feelings.
jannel

 Dont wake the dead,
Wake the dying,
Don't change what you've said,
Change what you're saying.

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