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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods 
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DEATHBED I've never felt this alone Not ever, never before I feel the vacancy Grow bigger inside of me As the subsistence of life Slowly leaves my resting body cold and pallid Dying on my deathbed As I lay I ask myself Why did you just ignore me? Why wouldn`t you belive in me? Didn`t you hear me cry? Should I`ve been louder? Oh well... Maby now you`ll listen At least for a short while My life, all my life Such a waste A fortuitous blaze An endless line of lies Tears and fairy-tales All forgotten And just like the morning haze It leaves me dying on my deathbed And as a last attempt for sympathy Even though I don`t know my sin I whisper..."please forgive me" It spins and fades Unheard in a room of darkness A sacred place I take a deep breath The last bitter-sweet taste of life I exhale and slip away Drift into eternity Just another lost soul Just another one As I of the morning, day and night Now gone... [This message has been edited by Broken (edited 03-20-2000).] |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
sadly beautiful great job !!! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
very nice. wonderful ending. jannel Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Depending on how you take this.. it could mean suicide, or someone at peace after a disease. Sensitively written!!  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
A release at the end of this sad poem. It be good or bad, who will know? Wonderful Work. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Broken~ this seemed sad, but I felt a sence of peace at the end..... great job! -SEA |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Way to close to home for me kid. I've got to back up on this one. All in all very true. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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