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Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods

0 posted 2000-03-19 12:46 PM



EVERY DAY

Lend me your eyes so I might see
The flaws I have and who to be
I wish I could, but I know all to well
Nothing will ever change me
I`m trapped inside eternal hell
I never chose or wanted to be
I truly hate this being i`ve become

And closing my eyes I hope I never
Never ever I`ll have to open'em again
I`m getting tired
Blinded by lies
Exhausted by words
I can`t tell what`s real anymore

Something holds me, squeezes me tight
All the time, it never lets go
But now more firmly than ever
And it hurts more than ever

I beg you please let me sleep tonight
Please make it good
I think I`ve earned it
Please do it right
I`m running out of light

No one has killed me as many times as you
Over and over you take your blade
Out of my back and into my heart
Pushing it deeper and harder every time
And twisting your knife you kill me again
I`m dead again
I`m dead again

I bleed my feelings on a white sheet
I colour the blank page red
It leaves me bloodless and pale
While the crimson pain thunder in my head

But still the hardest part for me is
To understand that even though you do all this
I love you more than ever
I love you more than words can say
And every day it`s killing me
You`re killing me every day


© Copyright 2000 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
Broken Wings
Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157
Miami, FL.
1 posted 2000-03-19 03:26 PM


But still the hardest part for me is
To understand that even though you do all this
I love you more than ever
I love you more than words can say
And every day it`s killing me
You`re killing me every day
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The whole poem is beautiful. This part just jumped up and grabbed my heart. I live with this confusion everyday of my life, but i also live with the hope of one day being able to let go and fly. I wish you the same freedom.
Take care **Hug**
Broken Wings


 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-19 03:51 PM


damn, this is amazing...truly...this is so well written that the emotions ache off the page. this is deeply personal work, and effects the reader deeply.
exceptional, please share more of you talent.
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Dark Enchantress
Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
3 posted 2000-03-19 04:37 PM


I really don't know what to say Broken...the depth in this is amazing and it leaves such a strong emotional impression upon me. Well done my friend.  

               Yours truly,
                  Angel


 "The dark weight of the hour
humming madly
filling my head
with blood
and sorrow
and dread
the executioner's song."
-Jewel
"The Dark Bells"

~*Angel of Darkness*~


Broken
Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
4 posted 2000-03-19 06:12 PM


Thanks Janet Marie, Broken Wings and D.E (my friend), your replies means a great deal to me, I feel appreciated. And though I`m new here in Dark passions I feel close to you. Sharing my feelings like this is a chance I don`t get other places than here. I care for you deeply.
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
5 posted 2000-03-20 05:48 PM


Broken thsi was heart wrenching soul speaking beautiful ... look you're making me jumble all my words ... Great Job !!!  

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-03-20 06:19 PM


Very deep and emotional writing..and also hard for me to understand why you love this person more and more.   James
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