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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~SHE~ She cries late at night...so no one else hears, though she's always grateful ... for the company of her own tears. There is so much of her no one else has tasted... so much kept locked inside ... she knows so much of her has been wasted. She aches for the things she's lost...so much taken away, so many lies, the worn and tired alibis...love just wouldn't stay. She asks for so little...only to die with no regrets... but then first she would have to know contentment... that hasn't happened yet. Eyes filled with tears...cant see into the future, but its just got to be better...of this she is sure. There is nothing in her present to make love last... and then there are those shadows... always knowing she is owned by her past. She knows she is the only one who can truly set her free... but the ties that bind now chain her, denying sweet destiny. So she cries late at night, drowning in her tears... and she pretends not to notice...the passing of her best years. Janet Marie < !signature--> Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-18-2000).] |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
This heart wrenching JM...so much sadness in these words. Beautifully written, but the sorrow in this piece haunts me. Bravo! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet... Our writing styles differ so much, however I still can feel a part of myself in your poetry. This piece was so well expressed, and the emotion powerfully described. I sit in awe of your work! You continue to make me strive to be a better poet. Thank you, and also thank you for your loving comments to my work. You make me SMILE!  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very nice and very sad. Your words sure express the emotion in this piece. The last line said it all. Well done! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Janet this was very good and very sad ... felt this way too many times to count you did a great job of expressing it ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
I`m not a girl, but your poem describes perfectly how I feel tonight. I write this as the tears burn my eyes red. It`s just been one of those days you know. I find comfort in you, thanks. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
So much emotion, saddness, regret. We have all felt this way. Wonderful depictions Janet Marie *hugs* May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, Describes my feelings to a T...have a tissue for the tears. Some day they will end. LW |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Awww Janet, you've done it again. Truly heartwrenching yet familiar all the same. I am speechless! --Jamie  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
spiked through the heart, here, Janet. This was so personal, felt like you wrote it for me...love to you. |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
So powerful and heartwrenching for sure..... This brought back many not so distant memories of hiding the tears in the shower's waterfall.... Incredibly raw emotion here! Kim |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
saw you wrote a new one so i had to read...and as always...WOW! how do you do it, hon? isn't it tiring writing this well?! as always, you floor me. somehow you manage to put these feelings on paper in a way i never will be able to do. i feel where you are coming from! i've done this, too! *********** She asks for so little...only to die with no regrets... but then first she would have to know contentment... that hasn't happened yet. ******** She knows she is the only one who can truly set her free... but the ties that bind now chain her, denying sweet destiny. you've captured these feelings so vividly. the imagery/word choices have so much impact!! amazing, girl!  ) |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
WOW! is all that i can say without letting the tears flow. Broken Wings  "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marie it is sad when so many years of disappointment and hurt can waste our years away. The healing takes so long but thank God if there is a beginning point and we can learn to trust and laugh and truly live life as it should be lived...embracing friendships and love. James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want to say a very heartfelt thank you to EACH one you who replied to this poem...I was so moved each time I came here and saw yet another encouraging compliment. For me it is my greatest pleasure and compliment to have another poet tell me that they were moved or related to my words. You all inspire me. thanks for allowing my "emotional outbursts" to inspire you  humbled by you words... take care,janet marie and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Bronx Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84Oviedo, Florida, U.S. |
wow- i loved that one. It had so many emotions. I love poems with emotions. This is why i go to this site. I~once again~love this poem. bye Bronx Be careful! It's a jungle out there! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
janet, as you can see, others relate to you and think of your poems as good. This was no exception, though you know your style i like best....*L*....this was sad and beautiful at the same time. |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
it's so beautiful but it hurts co'z it sounds so much of what i have been thru (for those who don't know I'm a female) ....where did you get this idea my dear... excellent job JM [This message has been edited by CrEaTuRe (edited 03-20-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I wanted to see what D.P. was like and when I read this......I knew in a heartbeat. This took my breath away J.M. and I'm sure you know why. The tears streaming down my face right now for once are not for me but for the understanding that I'm not as alone as I have always thought. This is an amazing piece, I think that I may be to afraid to tap into feelings this deep but can relate to your words as if they were my own. *AWHs* because you above all know they are the ones that ask nothing in return. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
This poem reminds me so much how important it is to live in the moment and not be "owned by the past" or wait for what will come in the future. Who knows what will be? This pulled on my heart strings too. Joy |
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