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Darkness Reigns |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Feasting upon your soiled mind. Perspiration furrows the brow. Madness barely contained. Ghastly images dance before your eyes. Voices taunting from within. Tingles run down your spine. Your hair stands and crawls along your skin. Senses enheightened. Your heart quickening it's pace. Hyperventilating. Gasping every breath. Face to face with the true meaning of madness. It's cloak of darkness suffocating. Overtaking; You. Copyright, 1999 by: KdW |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Beautfully written...so well written...leaves me speachless...yet a question stands in my mind What IS the true meaning of madness? "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
I certainly remember this one....and I still love it. Your imagery in this piece is wonderful. And your portrayel of a creeping madness is chilling! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful portrayl here.. madness is the dark cloak slowly creeping up on one. Wonderful imagery, great!!! Good work  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kim this is excellent..I could see my breath while reading it..lol perfect dark chilling imagery take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Well written...I felt like you were pulling me to the ending. Madness is indeed all around us. |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
TanAngel - One never quite knows, does one?! ; ) Ah Jonas - Isis - Thank you! Imagery is an area I began to really work on in the last few months and I am really pleased with how far my imagery has come! JM - LOL!~ Breathe!!!!!!!!! ; ) Thank you ! Lone Wolf - Indeed it is.. sometimes I hang precariously on the edge. Btw.. I just finished reading The Abyss - Excellent!!! Thank you all of you for your comments. Kim |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
great job Kim ... gasping for breath at your outstanding imagery "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
WOW!!!!!!! from beginning to end, so well written! i loved the way you ended it! ******* It's cloak of darkness suffocating. Overtaking; You. ******* WOW! |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Starrgazer - thank you! (Honestly, this is tame in my dark poetry... ) I feel I can not post some of my dark writing here because it is to graphic and/or you'd all REALLY wonder about me. LOL! (But True) Aiden Kelly, Thank you so very much! I felt when I wrote this that those lines really were strong in this piece. The rest almost feels like fluff around them. Kim |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Absolutely wonderful Kim! I'm speechless really...I've been there many times before but I don't think I've ever seen it portrayed in a way as great as this. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
great use of words to convey images. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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