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To Bid Love Goodnight
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To Bid Love Goodnight |
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star83 Junior Member
since 2000-02-27
Posts 26SD |
To Bid Love Goodnight Dost not breathe to love, and love thee tender breath thy breathe? I shalt not tempt thy lovely breath to breathe upon me thy loving tenderness, but bring with lovely breath, thy soft spoken words from a moon lit night, at Dusk-- before the soft night winds blow. Telling me this blasphemous truth I shall not try to move thy course among thy heart, but trying with pride, I might, disturb thy thoughts, on this starry eve, To caress my tender head where many afore have spoken with those courser lips! I tell you now, this very night, I shall go into the darkness, Dreary to come forth, some unexpected light; That I may find truth in these precious moments That which has some relience. Love can last a lifetime, With thine own patience and cradeled love, I shalt not test thee honorarble love, but perhaps wait silently for Love To brush upon my rosey cheek Whispering longing words, Simply of Love... "True love is like a ghost; everybody talks about it but few have seen it." La Rochefoucauld |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
star- this was very touching....i could feel the longing within this! i hope whoever the person in here is, knows how you feel. take care and i look forward to reading more from you. amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
great poem star I too could feel the sense of longing ... ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I too could feel the longing, almost 'see' it as though it were a tangible thing. Bravo May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful poem...I loved all the "thys" and 'thous"...i have never been able to write them in and make it work..you made it look easy! nice work. take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
are you a shakespeare wannabe b/c you're doing a pretty good job of conveying those intense and tragic emotions. i see it being preformed on a stage as a monologue spoken as an aside or from a hidden place while gazing adoringly on the object of love! i like that...when i can see or hear the poem in my head...that's awesome! good job!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
What longing I feel. Love the "thy, thou, thine". Not easy to work with. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
love the classic style and also the amount of emotion conveyed "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice style to convey your romantic feelings. James |
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