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morteZ Junior Member
since 2000-03-16
Posts 17 |
Drowning in my thoughts. They are the sea and I am the fat man. Sailing into myself on a boat made of myself. This is nice and calm, no waves to pound onto my body. Peaceful in an uncomfortable way. The water is a compulsory condiment. But that is acceptable. I do not mind all of these frivolities. They are what makes me me, thats good, isn't it? I cannot be sure but I shall try. |
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Mai Ling Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 15 |
Welcome to Dark Passions! a very unique and creative style of writing, well done! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
The water is a compulsory condiment.loved this  ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
nice style. welcome to dark passions. Sailing into myself on a boat made of myself. i like this. great simple piece. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
To me it sounds like you have alot of talent. Great work Love your style... Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Very good morteZ....I like your style.. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
very nicely done. i could completely relate to the last two lines. i will be looking for more of your work. oh yeah, welcome to passions!  i love too much, and not enough. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
We all live in the vast sea of our minds. A journey to understanding ourselves is the most courageous trip we may ever take. I enjoyed reading your work. Welcome! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
you have such a unique style! i like that! the journey to find yourself is always the most important... welcome to passions!! |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Very nice. (Everyone else has already stolen my opinions and placed them here, so I don't have a whole lot else to say) Looking forward to more. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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morteZ Junior Member
since 2000-03-16
Posts 17 |
wow! i didn't think that it was as good as it could have been, thanks all, i shall post more soon. morteZ |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
You swim a lot this is a very happy when swimming poem Very much part of my life Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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