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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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0 posted 2000-03-14 05:01 PM


~Eyes That Cant See~


If I was blind ... the way you seem to be...
then I would be spared--seeing all that's dying right in front of me.
Were there any witnesses ... were you notified...
did you even mourn -- when all my hope and desire died.
Your so oblivious...there are so many women living here inside of me.
Would you even realize...if I were to set any of them free.
Is it delusion that blinds ... every night lying here next to a stranger.
Somebody should explain...warn you of denials danger.
You wont give thanks--but you'll sure ask for favors.
When did love become a chore, when did it become such a labor.
Is there such a thing...as an innocent infidelity,
its only a distracting illusion...to comfort this dying reality.
What will it take for you to see--if I was bleeding out my eyes...
would you then understand...would you then hear my cries.

I wish I was blind...
the way that you seem to be,
Then I wouldn't have to watch...this love dying deep inside of me.

Janet Marie


 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
1 posted 2000-03-14 05:34 PM


This poem ached my heart....and haunted me. That is a mark of a good poem huh?
Smile.

JML

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
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Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-03-14 05:35 PM


Sad one Janet Marie.  But if you WERE blind, you other senses would take over and you would feel and touch the love dying inside.  There is no cure for that feeling alas...
Beautifully and sensitivly written  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
3 posted 2000-03-14 06:43 PM


This was very good Janet been there felt that  same feeling  felt love slipping through my fingers and  powerless to stop it  could only watch it go and I wished I didnt have to see also ... Great job  

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



Sven
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4 posted 2000-03-14 09:22 PM


Excellent Janet... but sooner or later, we all open our eyes .. .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


atslanta
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since 2000-03-10
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5 posted 2000-03-14 10:03 PM


Wonderful Janet, this was very heartfelt and I agree, if blindness overtook you, you would still be sensual to the heart and always faithful to it.  Thanks.

                       A

Mai Ling
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since 2000-03-15
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6 posted 2000-03-15 04:22 AM


A haunting tale of betrayal Janet. Painfully wonderful, great work!
CrEaTuRe
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Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
7 posted 2000-03-15 06:31 AM


it's sad but it happens to all of us sometimes you can see it but choose to be blind by it  co'z when we are  in love nothing else can be seen .....great one dear  
Aiden Kelly
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since 2000-02-14
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Ft. Wayne, IN USA
8 posted 2000-03-15 04:20 PM


two words for you...WOW! & this is absolutely haunting!  it simply floors me...as always!  )
ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11
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9 posted 2000-03-15 04:49 PM


I feel your words, they hurt yet they heal.  This dying heart of mine, they alwayz reveal.  Great poetry as alwayz.  Much love, One love PEACE


~~~love to those who love me, and peace to those who deem it necessary~~~

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2000-03-15 05:43 PM


Janet this is superb.  much applause.
SEA
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with you
11 posted 2000-03-15 10:34 PM


Janet~ this is so powerful. Another awesome poem! -SEA
Danny Holloway
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12 posted 2000-03-16 11:09 AM


"dying reality".  
Unique and interesting. Strong feelings within for sure.
Nice work.

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-03-16 04:27 PM


"If I was blind..the way you seem to be"..Janet that line says so much..I have felt this feeling so many times and I know that I have put other people thru this hell.  I hope for the best for you, hon.  James
Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30
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14 posted 2000-03-16 06:45 PM


Sad,.... people who are blind to love don't understand love very well. My English teacher once said that if everyone showed their feelings on the outside, everyone would be in tears. But I think children are different. Reach out to the ones who aren't blind. : ) This was done differently and with originality... thank you for sharing.
Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
15 posted 2000-03-16 06:56 PM


This is amazing in the depth of emotion you express. Superb writing.
Wikket
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16 posted 2000-03-16 08:03 PM


Janet Marie,
Are we Soul Sisters or what?  These words evoke such emotion inside me, I can't help but admit to feeling them before.  You know your great at displaying your emotions?! I hope I can learn something from you!  --Jamie    

serenity blaze
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17 posted 2004-06-15 05:59 AM


watch my heart break with this one--it's how I knew we were twins.


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
18 posted 2004-06-15 09:05 AM



See?  Sun doesn't catch all of 'em...but later is better'n sooner sometimes...that way, I can measure the growth...

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