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StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
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Texas

0 posted 2000-03-14 01:12 AM


Before we get all carried away and say things we don't mean
Can we just talk for awhile, we're supposed to be a team
Whatever happened to working problems out
It seems to have been replaced with a yell, a scream, a shout
Our love is slowly dying, I see it fading away
So can we just talk... give me a reason to stay
--
No, it's too late for that, I see it in your eyes
We've done hurt each other too much, lived too many lies
So afraid of failing we must have looked the other way
And now we do not talk for days upon days
I could say I'm sorry, but that would be a lie- I'm not
We have some great memories that will never be forgot
--
I cannot point fingers I know we both were to blame
And even if we were to start over things would never be the same
So can we just talk for awhile thisis not how I want it to end
I want to walk away still calling you a friend
I never meant to hurt you, I hope you believe thats true
And no matter what happens, I'll still care for you
--
I don't want to leave like this with strings left untied
Just for a moment lets put away our foolish pride
Goodbye is the hardest thing I'll ever have to say
But we both know we can't go on living this way
So talk to me this one last time and then I'll leave you alone
And I'll try not to cry as I say goodbye to the only love I've ever known


 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



© Copyright 2000 Shan Crider - All Rights Reserved
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
1 posted 2000-03-14 06:46 AM


This was wonderful Star...from the first line to the last...excellent.

              Yours truly,
                 Angel


 "The dark weight of the hour
humming madly
filling my head
with blood
and sorrow
and dread
the executioner's song."
-Jewel
"The Dark Bells"

~*Angel of Darkness*~


StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
2 posted 2000-03-15 12:41 PM


Thanks Angel  

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 2000-03-15 12:53 PM


EEks - tough spot.  I hope the goodbye was to her alone and not to the entire world - that "Not go on Living this way" line snet me pondering.  Great poem...can relate only too well.


Michael

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
4 posted 2000-03-15 03:23 PM


Wow, this was like every relationship i was ever in...scary. Good, but scary...*L*
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-03-15 05:47 PM


I'm with Michael on this one, powerful and sad, just hope it's only a good bye to one, not everything.  Well done  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
6 posted 2000-03-15 10:02 PM


Michael, Isis --no need to worry was goodbye to him and in a sense to THAT life but hopefully on to a better dare i say happier life ?

JLM-thanks for your reply worst part of relationships is the goodbye I think...

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
7 posted 2000-03-15 10:08 PM


This is powerful StarrGazer...good description of such a sad and painful moment.

 Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.
-Edgar Allen Poe


SEA
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with you
8 posted 2000-03-15 10:08 PM


Starr~ this was fantastic. It is so hard to say good bye, even when you know it is for the best. Try not to worry about the strings, some will be left untied no matter what you do.-SEA
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