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Fain An' I Should See
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Fain An' I Should See imprison(ing) collective dream dream(s) dream(ed) dream(ing) mankind's sole triumph... is that o' chancherous failure-s Nightmared~ (tossing-turned) bred alive as morning (mourning) star - Lucifer's Pleasure ~sanctified evil~ christened holy...wholly; drowned under tears despair(ing) in callous bed o' selfish desire Hope~lessness; Hope~ turned alas distraught; to a playground verb where - legions seven ("deadly" sins) drawn admixed; amalgamation- in demons three ‘gainst angels four (fore) enraptured all in hate; dueling, o'er malignant morality; e'en though... submerged ‘neath the tainted tang o' quagmire shamed ~still~ an' yet; pursuing power/pooled in wanton lust(ing) Love~ terminology termed; catechism thrown... tossed aside into faithless shadowed streams turbulent and troubled; no hint o' "crystal clearing" where... faith~ tear-born trash o' guilt implied denied retried an' achieved deems futures ne'er found... for that all which is claimed, e'er is it shown, in tragic scenery- ~benevolence~ acts o' kind(ness) are faux an' far between |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Ancient dark here very biblical old dawn of time lucifer demons angels very much my thing an excelent piece "And the world was thrown into eternal night The seas boiled And the rivers ran with blood And all was the blackness of the fallen one and his children roamed free of the shackles of light" Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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Anthony Junior Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 12 |
Loved it |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I agree with walter... liked this...cryptic and dark... creative stlye and presentation too take care jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Chris - this has got to be my personal favorite of all your works. I could just be partial to the subject matter but this is written so well... It wreaks of futility and power simultaneously. Love the line: an' yet; pursuing power/pooled in wanton lust(ing) Love~ but then you knew that would grab me.... Wonderful poem bud... michael |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Very intense... I find it reminds me of the confusion found in the bible - was that your intent? [This message has been edited by Seaangel (edited 03-13-2000).] |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Walter - Thank you! Exactly the feel I was hoping for! Anthony - Thank you. JM - Thank you too, I'm glad you enjoyed... and I always take care!  Mike - Yes, thank you... and thank you for leaving the demons at my house instead of taking them with you! They've been constant companionship since you've left...good and bad. SeaAngel - Yes and no... yes in that I wanted it to feel "biblical" but no one the confusion part.. that wasn't intentional.. it just sorta happened!  Thanks... |
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