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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods 
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Feed me, take me Fake me, brake me Slice me, dice me Hurt me, entice me Hit me, kick me Toss me, throw me See me, love me Kiss me, thrill me Give me, send me Cause me pain Wound me, torture me Fright me, slaughter me Fill me, drag me Lift me, kill me Ups and downs are all it is My life is just a total miss I`ll always miss your shameless kiss As I drift into my endless bliss |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is good, the use of the repetative rhyme is creative and the ending verse is perfect...made the poems emotions perfectly stated. nice work.jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Broken~ sounds like you had a rough one. Great writting.-SEA |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
shameless kiss, but yet he was ashamed.... Great poem, hope to read more in the future. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
NIN fan? they have a song alot like this. i think it's called Hurt? if you don't know it you'd probably like it. i liked the concept. i love too much, and not enough. |
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