The Enemy.....a villanelle

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Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

0 posted 2000-03-11 11:32 PM

I see him calmly standing there
So confident and void of fear
Mocking me with icy stare.

Unable to escape his stare
Of confidence combined with leer
I see him calmly standing there.

Sarcastic monster! How he dare
To criticize my weak veneer
Mocking me with icy stare.

Remindful of an old nightmare
Recurrent in my early years
I see him calmly standing there.

Fiend from darkness! How he bares
My soul with evil grin so queer
Mocking me with icy stare.

I strike at him with hatred bare!
But, through the shattered cracks of mirror,
I see him calmly standing there
Mocking me with icy stare.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 2000-03-11 11:39 PM

Sir Balladeer, Bravo!! Nice for you to pop in again. I miss you big guy. A wonderful vilanous (?) story

May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

2 posted 2000-03-12 08:15 AM

A great Villanelle Sir ! Enjoyed it very much.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-12 02:10 PM

this is great...love the repetative lines and your rhyme is great...all leading up to that perfect ending of who your conflict is with...
i have one of those same mirrors

great job...
take care, jm

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-03-12 04:06 PM

I don't know 'deer - how you do these things are a mystery to me...

awesome anyway, that's all I can say!!

K

'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2000-03-13 11:00 AM

Isis....great to be here. I'll try to do it more often.

Munda....I thank you. Glad you enjoyed it!

JanetMarie...I think we all have that mirror. Your comments are very appreciated.

Severn...Beats me. I'm just trying to work hard to get up to your level!!!

Anthony
Junior Member

since 2000-03-13

Posts 12

6 posted 2000-03-13 11:16 AM

Ive only just joined but am already impressed with the standard of poetry. Very enjoyable, liked the ending especially, the repeating lines giving the pace as well as giving the emotion you feel towards, yourself.

ill_tactics
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since 2000-02-11

Posts 149