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Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

0 posted 2000-03-09 12:09 PM


Hey guys. I've missed you. I haven't been around much because I'm at home this week on break. I'll be back on a more regular basis soon.  


Cold and Impatient

Waiting
Wondering if anyone awaits me
Waiting to find if
To him
I am anyone
Someone to fill
The Emptiness
A warm body for his cold bed
A warm thought in his hopeless head
A warm coat on the already dead

Waiting
Tiny space
Where the heavy air is mixed with
Cheap cologne
From someone waiting before
Someone pacing this floor
Someone looking for more

Waiting
Watching
The flicker
Flicker
Flick
Of the lounge television
Through rippled glass
A lumpy mass
Where only shadows pass

Waiting

And the doors open
To release a man
Who glances in my direction
I wonder
If he can see
That this thin shirt does not keep me warm
Even in the thickly burning air
Even in his deeply searing stare
Even in the arms of those who care


[This message has been edited by Jannel (edited 03-10-2000).]

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devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
1 posted 2000-03-09 11:44 PM


this one hooked me in with its style.  did he see????  great piece.  

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
2 posted 2000-03-10 01:19 PM


cold and impatient..."waiting...wondering if anyone awaits me..."
we can all relate to that i bet!
well written...
see you around


 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



ill_tactics
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149

3 posted 2000-03-11 07:58 PM


I liked this poem, the way its written, etc etc etc.  I'm waiting if anyone awaits me also, specially him....  Much love, One love PEACE
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