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The Rape of Mother Nature
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The Rape of Mother Nature |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
He whispers words of deceit Into her ear With only thoughts to lie and cheat These he forces her to eat, And to fear His silver tongue snakes its way Into her heart His breath clouds brightest day She has to listen as he begins to say, It is only the start He has tainted the purest snow Defiled her temple Brought the highest mountains low Dealt the skies the cruelest blow, And the trees as well Cold is the summer wind now For he has the throne And in the darkness the stars bow And hide themselves from him now, Where once proudly shone She knows no hope is left For her precious land Poison is the stench on his breath Foretelling his own death, By his own hand |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow the imagery in this is superb, and i feel some old "influences" here too  again your depth shines... man will always be his own worst enemy... self inflicted downfall... still stalking you,,jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
when i read your work i immediately get on my knees and bow before ever actually reading because i know i am in for a visual ride of a lifetime. this piece was no different. very original topic, great title, and wonderful piece of art all together. your biggest fan aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Very powerful and clear imagery with a strong message backing it! This was well written!!! |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
His silver tongue snakes its way Into her heart This was such a vivid line, and a vivid poem. Your words came together nicely into this rhyme frame. Great writing on a well-chosen topic. Jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank ya'll...i bow down to you. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Compliments from here as well. I agree with the praises mentioned above. Nice poetry. |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
OOOOOOOH!!!!! I like this one, nice imagery, very vivid, I could "feel" the words. Now thats a poem. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You my friend have a silver pen with your words, visually great, great as always  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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