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StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas

0 posted 2000-03-06 05:19 PM


if any of you have a title suggestion for this it would be appreciated as well...

While in silent slumber i was awoken
To words that were said but never spoken
To doors that were opened but seemed to be locked
To answer the door, yet no one ever knocked

Yet I invited him in like a long lost friend
Embracing the begining of what some fear to be the  end
Cordially welcoming most peoples sworn enemy
As I invited death to come sit with me


 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~

© Copyright 2000 Shan Crider - All Rights Reserved
danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-03-07 12:56 PM


first of all, i liked this poem very much.
as far as a title? hmmmm.......i don't know. maybe something like "Invited". anyway- again, well done.

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-03-07 02:20 PM


I suggest "Dark Companion"
Nice poem.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-07 06:48 PM


While in silent slumber i was awoken
To words that were said but never spoken


this is so good...slightly haunting, powerful short poem...much said in so few words. great work.jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


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