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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
A FRIEND 7/18/89 See the old man sitting there He reaches down to his friend His companion, this dog Stroking its head, fearing the end He stares absently at the sky Knowing his body is failing Time has stolen memories The sun is rapidly sinking And as I sat and watched, I came to understand That memories have a way Of coloring what’s at hand The heat was now just bearable, And the old man sat in his shade Petting his dog, staring ahead Before him his life displayed On some private screen of his own He watched unblinking And I watched him; As the sun kept sinking Then I gathered my senses And finally came to realize It was written clearly Within his melancholy eyes He knows himself best of all And his time soon will end And all he unselfishly thinks of is Who will take care of the dog? His only friend |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you amaze me, the way you can look at something (or someone) and then give it all this emotion and imagery...this is perfection. "The heat was now just bearable, And the old man sat in his shade Petting his dog, staring ahead Before him his life displayed On some private screen of his own He watched unblinking And I watched him; As the sun kept sinking Then I gathered my senses And finally came to realize It was written clearly Within his melancholy eyes He knows himself best of all" |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
This is wonderful. I can imagine the fear inside that old man as he wondered who would take care of his friend. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks guys. |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
JML you did a great job the imagery was amazing I could see the old man sitting there, the expression on his face, ... !!!  ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
you continue to amaze me. i've seen that old man. i've felt sorry for him unknowing, maybe uncaringly, not even thinking maybe he didnt want sympathy. this was so great, and i cant get his face out of my mind. so sweet, so tender, so calm. you give me chills, and you also give me great pictures to think about. i love it and i will always be a devoted reader. so now that i've inflated your ego enough, ill stop, and read another. bravo!! aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem - I could see the look in his eyes. What a wonderful depiction. Grade A material, JML. Michael |
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