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Michael
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0 posted 2000-03-05 06:33 AM


I SEE


I see, the children laugh and play,
The sun brings in a brand new day,
A smile goes a long, long way
Towards the misleading.
I see, the wings of darkness descend,
With screeching claws to defend
The beginning of the end
Of the preceding.

And I see, love always comes and goes,
But no one ever really knows
Just where it is the cold wind blows,
Or why it chills me.
But I know, all that I see with my eyes
Really shouldn't befall such a surprise,
But I've been blinded by simple lies,
And that just kills me.

And I feel, from time to time and here and there,
Line after line for truth for dare,
Day after day there's no one there
For me to lean on.
And I know, the day of innocence is gone
And yet the shadows linger on,
Images in the darkness drawn
In shades of neon.

And I see, the etchings of my own headstone.
And I sing, but only of the curse to which I'm prone.
And I cry, but only when I am alone
That none perceive me.
For I know, a tear cried in the dark
Desists and dies, desolate and stark;
For even in bearing an angel's mark
Who would believe me?

And I hurt, though nothing's there to cause me pain.
And I search, for answers I cannot attain,
Even as I cross that astral plain
As I go flying.
For I live, In a world that's never cared
For dreams emotionally impaired,
Or could understand what I have shared
There with the dying.

Michael Anderson

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AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
1 posted 2000-03-05 08:59 AM


beautiful words...
to hurt though nothing causes pain...
love always comes and goes...
so much to ponder on...from it
love
Avanti


 you don't have to understand completely..to love completely...
remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 2000-03-05 12:26 PM



KimW
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 268
Medford, Oregon, USA
3 posted 2000-03-05 04:16 PM


seeking the words to express the effect............

[This message has been edited by KimW (edited 03-05-2000).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-03-05 10:54 PM


And I see, love always comes and goes,
But no one ever really knows
Just where it is the cold wind blows,
Or why it chills me.
But I know, all that I see with my eyes
Really shouldn't befall such a surprise,
But I've been blinded by simple lies,
And that just kills me.

And I feel, from time to time and here and there,
Line after line for truth for dare,
Day after day there's no one there
For me to lean on.
And I know, the day of innocence is gone
And yet the shadows linger on,
Images in the darkness drawn
In shades of neon."
-------
"For I live, In a world that's never cared
For dreams emotionally impaired,
Or could understand what I have shared"...
------------

There is a place where someone cares...
where understanding and forgiveness fares.
Where faith and trust are never far apart,
and unconditional loves holds your hand and heals your heart.
jm

...believing takes us halfway there...

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
5 posted 2000-03-06 12:57 PM


i always find something in that i have in common with your poems. you write of things i often feel, but never quite find the words to express it as deeply as i feel it. wonderful work micheal.
Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
6 posted 2000-03-06 10:46 AM


Sigh... I dont know what to say... Excellent poem Michael.  
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
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7 posted 2000-03-06 02:35 PM


Thank you all for the comments.  I felt this poem bordered on bizzare to say the least.  That any of you got anything at all out of it leads me to commend your efforts or sympathize the extent darkness we must truly share.

Janet, I hope to find that place someday, truly.

Danni, I knew that you, (if anybody in here), would understand.  


Michael


StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
8 posted 2000-03-06 04:50 PM


Michael, this makes two of your poems I have read so far and now I think I will go searching for more of them they are darkly brilliant and I too can find ways to relate your poems that I've read there is  something  in them that leaves me feeling as though all hope is lost but yet it doesn't hurt to carry that littl eglimmer of hope inside anyway... difficult to explain I guess ... but either way I really enjoy reading your poems  

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-03-06 07:35 PM


Quoting Starrgazer from above...
"there is  something  in them that leaves me feeling as though all hope is lost but yet it doesn't hurt to carry that little glimmer of hope inside"...

yet another...sees your light...(smile)

                  

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


Michael
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Posts 7666
California
10 posted 2000-03-07 04:09 PM


Thank you StarrGazer.  As Janet and a few others have also let me know - there's always a glimmer of hope, even in my darkest of works.  If there wasn't, I suppose I wouldn't be writing at all.

A smile to you too, Janet.  

Michael

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
11 posted 2000-03-08 02:53 PM


And I cry, but only when I am alone
That none perceive me.
For I know, a tear cried in the dark
Desists and dies, desolate and stark;
For even in bearing an angel's mark
Who would believe me?


Ok...so how do you know me so well? This is exactly how I feel most of the time. To show that I am vulerable and can cry gives people the ammunition to hurt me farther. I can not let that happen. I hope to beat that feeling soon!! Well written again my friend.

Flame
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 34
Tennessee
12 posted 2000-03-08 05:41 PM


A Wonderful piece of work..
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