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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
I want something I need it I don't know what I'm not sure how to get it But I know I need to hurry before the emptiness swallows me. For moments I am happy, but it quickly fades away So many ups and downs; too many always feeling lost A growing sense of emptiness Taking over me Yet i still fight vigilantly Though i'm losing energy One day i will drop tired bruised defeated Unless i find that something please excuse this one. went straight on the board. i think i can safely say i have had a very frustrating week.  |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Oh how I can relate to this! Exceptional work danni...the need you describe rings loud and true in this poem. Simple words from a simple guy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
from frustration...comes inspiration... good work danni,jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Hope you find that "something" soon. Sometimes a spontaneous write is more revealing and needed that those we struggle to get just right. Anyway, nice job. |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
It is always good that before you find something...you know what something your looking for. I understand the feeling...the emptiness and I know hot it feels. I hope you feel better...soon "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thank you all so very much for reading my rants. its such a frustrating thing to know what is wrong but have no idea how to fix it or where to start. seems a neverending battle. thanks again! |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
One day i will drop tired bruised defeated I love this part because it's exactly how i feel right now, tired and bruised, yet far from defeated. still, i know where you are coming from on this oen because ive had so much go on in the last month or so of my life i wonder when all the craziness will stop, if ever. and i feel like anymore im just going thru the motions. i think what i need to find is me, myself. thanks for sharing. aimee  Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Candy Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 17 |
I feel the same right about now. i wish could find it too. Candy |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thanks to you both for your comments. devin-we seem to have alot in common. definately with ya about going through the motions. though i must admit things in my life are starting to get better. but like i said-still feels like there is something missing. thanks again! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Great poem in my opinion because it was written like it was. You seem to have described me to a tee, and others too it seems. Knowing what is broken, but not knowing how to fix it...you described it perfectly. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I can relate well to the frustration, danni. If you ever find what that something is...please let me know - I haven't a clue...but I think I need it as well. Wonderful poem... michael |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thanks to both of you for your comments. and micheal, if and when i find that something, i'll be sure to let you know. many thanks again! |
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mojar Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169granbury, texas, usa |
hi danni, as usual you write what you feel, and i applaud that, too many write something other than feelings from the heart. sorry i have been really busy lately, not much time to visit here, but i do miss it. love mo. |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
echoing previous sentiments but .. if you find that something before I do please please share it with us Great poem !!! ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
my dear friend mo. lovely to see you back in here. hopefully it will be a little more often! i can understand the whole being busy thing though. and thank you so much for the wonderful comment. 'tis always a pleasure. starr-when i find it i will certainly post it here for all to see. thank you for commenting. |
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