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danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin

0 posted 2000-03-04 01:12 AM


I want something
I need it
I don't know what
I'm not sure how to get it
But I know I need to hurry
before the emptiness
swallows me.

For moments
I am happy, but
it quickly fades away
So many ups
and downs;
too many
always feeling
lost
A growing sense
of emptiness
Taking over me
Yet i still fight
vigilantly
Though i'm losing
energy
One day i will drop
tired
bruised
defeated
Unless i find
that something

please excuse this one. went straight on the board. i think i can safely say i have had a very frustrating week.  

© Copyright 2000 Dannielle - All Rights Reserved
Jonas
Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
1 posted 2000-03-04 01:45 AM


Oh how I can relate to this! Exceptional work danni...the need you describe rings loud and true in this poem.

 Simple words from a simple guy

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-04 12:15 PM


from frustration...comes inspiration...
good work danni,jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-03-04 12:18 PM


Hope you find that "something" soon.  Sometimes a spontaneous write is more revealing and needed that those we struggle to get just right.
Anyway, nice job.

TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
4 posted 2000-03-04 12:48 PM


It is always good that before you find something...you know what something your looking for. I understand the feeling...the emptiness and I know hot it feels. I hope you feel better...soon


 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
5 posted 2000-03-04 07:51 PM


thank you all so very much for reading my rants. its such a frustrating thing to know what is wrong but have no idea how to fix it or where to start. seems a neverending battle. thanks again!
devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
6 posted 2000-03-04 07:58 PM


One day i will drop
tired
bruised
defeated

I love this part because it's exactly how i feel right now, tired and bruised, yet far from defeated.  still, i know where you are coming from on this oen because ive had so much go on in the last month or so of my life i wonder when all the craziness will stop, if ever.  and i feel like anymore im just going thru the motions.  i think what i need to find is me, myself.  thanks for sharing.

aimee  


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Candy
Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 17

7 posted 2000-03-05 11:40 AM


I feel the same right about now. i wish could find it too.

Candy

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
8 posted 2000-03-06 12:40 PM


thanks to you both for your comments. devin-we seem to have alot in common. definately with ya about going through the motions. though i must admit things in my life are starting to get better. but like i said-still feels like there is something missing. thanks again!
PoeticKnight
Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
9 posted 2000-03-06 08:21 AM


Great poem in my opinion because it was written like it was. You seem to have described me to a tee, and others too it seems. Knowing what is broken, but not knowing how to fix it...you described it perfectly.
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
10 posted 2000-03-06 02:27 PM


I can relate well to the frustration, danni.  If you ever find what that something is...please let me know - I haven't a clue...but I think I need it as well.  Wonderful poem...


michael

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
11 posted 2000-03-07 12:39 PM


thanks to both of you for your comments.  
and micheal, if and when i find that something, i'll be sure to let you know.
many thanks again!

mojar
Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa
12 posted 2000-03-07 01:27 PM


hi danni, as usual you write what you feel, and i applaud that, too many write something other than feelings from the heart. sorry i have been really busy lately, not much time to visit here, but i do miss it. love mo.
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
13 posted 2000-03-07 04:21 PM


echoing  previous sentiments  but .. if you find that something before I do  please please share it with us   Great poem !!!


 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
14 posted 2000-03-08 12:39 PM


my dear friend mo. lovely to see you back in here. hopefully it will be a little more often! i can understand the whole being busy thing though. and thank you so much for the wonderful comment. 'tis always a pleasure.
starr-when i find it i will certainly post it here for all to see.   thank you for commenting.

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