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A Fool's Ditty (Poet DeVine Challenge)
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A Fool's Ditty (Poet DeVine Challenge) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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A FOOL'S DITTY If the only good hearts are the ones That love enough to be broken. Why is the closet full of skeletons Choking on three words misspoken. If only a fool wants what he Knows he could never hold on to. The jester I assuredly must be, For I still believe Love true. But I went to bed with the love of my life And I woke up with a stranger. Swearing this woman would one day be my wife, God, I never saw the danger. The candle still burns but the wick's near gone, How much longer can it possibly last? As everyday carries me further on From that ever unforgiving past. I close my eyes to see her face, But the dream seems to be fading. Only emptiness taking her place, In the walls of blackness cascading. All embers dying in solitude, Neath the shadow of hell's spire. Sweet Death become the interlude, Sweet Love, ever the liar. Michael Anderson *Sorry PdV, I know you were wanting a positive poem to come from this phrase. It just ain't there right now. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It may not be positive but it's one hell of a poem! Sorry to hear about your wick  |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Another excellent piece Michael. Would you happen to be willing to lend me some of that talent? I seem to be a quart low |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
I don't have any words of wisdom to give, but I can offer you a compliment on this beautiful, haunting poem. You have great talent, and I feel lucky to have the chance to read it. Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Challenge met, my friend. I always know that your poetry will reflect how you feel at that time. Though I hoped for beautiful and hopeful...I'll settle for beautiful and haunting!  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Feelings coming straight from your heart- can only make this more stunning Michael, I still say challenge well met!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I originally posted this to Open - but I really thought it belonged here in the Dark Forum upon a second reading so I moved it. Balladeer - got one I can borrow?...LOL Mistikman - as much as you want - but careful, it comes in a painful package. bobbycat, thank you very much for your sincere words. PdV - I'm glad you're not diasppointed. devina - yeah, I think I'm still somewhat stunned...LOL thank you dear. Michael |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Could I borrow an ounce of your talent? You have so much to spare. I vowed to only read "happy" poetry today, but I couldn't resist this. Your words beckon me when I log on here every day. I do not usually reply, but that does not mean I do not devour every word that you pen. As always, Michael, your poetry touched me. Chinese fortune cookie say: There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If the only good hearts are the ones That love enough to be broken. Why is the closet full of skeletons ****Choking on three words misspoken.**** If only a fool wants what he Knows he could never hold on to. The jester I assuredly must be, For I still believe Love true. ------- ****every single one of your poems has that one line or verse that just knocks me out...and defines the poem for me...THAT line is no exception to this rule... dont apologize for this one Michael... its emotionally and poeticly perfect. The candle flame may burn down, fade, then expire... but our search for love is constant, as is the desire. What a "fool" believes... when by his own heart, he's been deceived... Faith that those 3 words will again be both heard and spoken, pick up the pieces ... of this venial heart broken. Always knowing theres a light shining with in and above... always believing in the gifts of forgiveness and true love. janet marie< !signature--> Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be... Jackson Browne *I miss you baby... I love you...always. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-02-2000).] |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
*sigh* if only pain was such a wonderful muse to us all... this was beautifully sad, mchael. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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