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one for Mr Poe? |
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moebius Junior Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 11 |
This was indirectly inspired by a poem by Edgar Alan Poe. I read somewhere that he had written a poem like this and was inspired (forgive me for using inspired twice *oops*, used it again). 7 x 2 x 1 Upon awakening I could at once sense a strange Feeling of claustrophobia, a fear of which I have no previous experience Still drowsy I make to rub my eyes The shock reels me as my hands collide With some barrier in the gloom I remain motionless, gasping for breath As I recover from the fright My mind races with thoughts as to what I could have encountered Fearing the worst I slowly and nervously Raise my hand once more Dreading the anticipated contact As I do so my mind begins to ponder The cold hard surface on which I lie Suddenly contact Merely inches above my chest Panicking, my hands flail all round me Discovering the dimensions of my resting place --- I am open to suggestions as to how I could better convey the need for speed in reading the start of the second verse. Thanx |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
personally i think all was conveyed very well. this is a great piece. waking up in your coffin. i can't even begin to imagine the feeling. i think this would be pretty close. very well done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ooooh..this one gives me chills...well written, Mr. Poe would enjoy it! janet marie |
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