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| Dark Poetry #1 |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Hovering about my mind the storm gathers Forces of nature of which can never be controlled My premonitions have been shatter and hopes denied I struggle to breath as the air thins around me Pressing on the world spins faster than I can move Disorientated I stumble dropping “that” which I once cared As I go to pick “that” up, it cuts my hand I have been worn down and buried half way at “that” ’s hands Angered I turn and walk away, saving what’s left Leaving “that” behind never to turn back, never to think twice A new path lies before my life … leading far from here Understanding this horror is not something I wish to do Something about the way the night blends with the horizon pushes me Forward the path leads though the briars and thorns Yet along this painful path there is no “that” to disappoint So I walk … I walk away. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all (Creed) baerlon |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
baerlon, this is an incredible poem, so well written and full of emotion and expression. I like the use of "that" to replace the emotion your speaking of...or not speaking of(smile) and I like the ending lines...very good work. take care, janet marie ...found your heart-then lost your lover...licked your wounds then run for cover... take your time...there will be another... and dont make the same mistake twice... unless you can pay the price... Dan Fogelberg |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Thanks Jan, if you really want to know what "that" stands for it is freinds. Wow theres some good english. arr But you can put what ever fits in your life in it's place. That is the beuty of poetry Well anyway thanks again < !signature--> There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all (Creed) baerlon [This message has been edited by baerlon (edited 02-12-2000).] |
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