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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
INSIDE Your smiling so deep...I hear from all... Your outfit is perfect...your hair all done... "All set for the camera"...my pal remarked. I thought for a moment then... tears began to flow I was asked why...? Just smiling..I say... It's all for the better...but there's just these feelings inside... Walking around the town...seeing too many people All asking for you...like i were to know... The Where is? And How is? I answered a hundred... All happy...all fine... Turning away...the tears just keep flowing... Nothing unsual just a feeling inside... Acquaintances add pain...it's not their fault... They remember us from college...together...so much See them on Main Street...while i'm trying to move on... Just then they enquire about deeds so old... I’m left with the impact...and back to square one... Still...invisible the tears are... Unknown to the world...the feeling insid... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday... Avanti Rao [This message has been edited by AVANTI (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
I liked this very much. Especially "see them on Main Street...deeds so old." Reminds me of going home to where people remember another me. Jannel I'm just saying that we've mistakn one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word. 10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
a wonderful poem. there seems to be so much that we keep hidden. leaves you wondering if anyone knows who you really are. sometimes you even wonder who you really are. well captured! Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Reminds me of 'Funeral In the Rain' by Chris Issac. Sad, heartfelt poem. Showing the emotions so well. Great job  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I really enjoyed this poem Avanti. Especially "Still...invisible the tears are..." "Unknown to the world...the feeling inside..." |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
This was great...it reminds me of how I felt after my first love rejected me...such a long time ago... ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ *She loves, she's Love, and yet she is not lov'd* |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thankyou ISIS... I must read "funreal in the rain" chris Issac thanx jannel munda and venus for realting to me...it nice to know i'am not alone you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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gypsyqlt Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 147Bradford,Vt USA |
Oh Girl, you are not alone. I know where you are ...Hurts like hell, but we will survive, huh ? Jocelyn |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
another heartfelt poem by Avanti...this one is SO very good...I like the point of view its written from...take care, janet marie ps...your name is so different and poetic sounding...I love writing it..(smile) ...baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found... it will all be gone when you turn around... cause ... nothin' lasts forever anyway... Rick Roberts-Windmills |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"Back to square one" - how the heck does it always seem to come to that. I can relate only too well to those words. Great work, AVANTI, enjoyed this poem much. michael |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Wow Avati sounds so painful n so very true!One could really associte thereown feelings with that poem! faith |
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