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lost
Junior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 16
New York, NY

0 posted 2000-01-31 11:24 PM


screaming, crying, a circle of madness
taunting, teasing, voices of sadness
i'm slipping and sliding losing my grasp
i'm sitting here hoping this feeling will pass
but the longer i wait, the further i fall
until i feel like i mean nothing at all
i long to get out of this nose dive descent
but the harder i fight the more i feel spent
nothing is hopeless, a glimmer of hope?
ugh!
how should i end it, razor or rope?


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danni
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since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
1 posted 2000-01-31 11:44 PM


oops-it doubled

[This message has been edited by danni (edited 01-31-2000).]

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
2 posted 2000-01-31 11:44 PM


i know this feeling well. great expression.
choose not to end it with razor nor rope, but the will to fight and find your happiness. that is the only way it will truly end, as tiring as it may be. to choose the latter is to let it win. hope things get better.


 Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear.
-Tool-

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-01-31 11:47 PM


There is always a glimmer of hope, look for it instead of the rope or dagger.
Welcome to the dark forum, hope you have read the rules and understand everything here
if not please feel free to email me with any questions.

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)



lost
Junior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 16
New York, NY
4 posted 2000-01-31 11:53 PM


actually I have a less bleak line for the ending

"maybe some day i'll be able to cope"

but I thought the razor & rope was more dramatic

childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
5 posted 2000-02-01 07:10 AM


For people who struggle with such feelings the war is life long with each day a new battle to be fought and won.  You express these feeligns well.
Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
6 posted 2000-02-02 06:11 PM


Great-
I liked the poem a bunch!  we all feel like this.  Never give up on youself and never loose hope!
Poetically yours
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


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