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Darkness In A Bottle
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Darkness In A Bottle |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
My darkness is held tight in a bottle With a cork that holds it in I never want to let that darkness free I never want to see it's ugly face Smokey gray and black It swirls In the clear glas walls Raging in the confinment Screaming to be let free My darkness is held in a bottle The cork is lossing its grip Soon the darkness seeps out Around me, swirling madly I cannot stop it now Its suffocating me Taking me with it to another place All that's left now Is the clear glass bottle Empty on the table JOY |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I don't know if this is supposed to be related to drinking alcohol or not...but that is the way I percieved it and corrualated to me...so you can say I did enjoy and at the same time felt this in some way to my life! very good read "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful Joy, different views for different readers. That is mastery  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
wonderful work joy... the imagery is captivating... i can't help but think of the Arabian Nights' stories of jinnees being set free from their holding places in bottles and lamps... very good job  sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
After I finished this, I too had the image of a genie in a bottle. I was wondering if anyone might see it this way too! And while it isn't exactly about alchohol, I can see how this poem could be interpreted in so many different ways. Mastery. A word I could get used to! JOY |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Beautifully done So many ways to look at it and find some new meaning Richard |
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