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Neala
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since 1999-08-21
Posts 262
Florida, USA

0 posted 2000-01-20 04:49 PM


When A girl cries
Her world stands still
Knowone hears
knowone cares
Knowone understands
Her pain
Knowone can handle
Her life
her problems
That is what happens
When a young girl cries

-Neala
(Goddess of Sadness)

© Copyright 2000 Rachel Parrish - All Rights Reserved
brandywine
Junior Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 19
Illinois
1 posted 2000-01-20 04:52 PM


You seem to be going thru a rough time....and are expressing it well.... if you need to talk...i am here

 We are each of us angels with only one wing...
and the only way we are able to fly..
is by embracing each other.

JD
Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 61
N Prov
2 posted 2000-01-21 12:03 PM


good work

JD



 Everything Dies



Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

3 posted 2000-01-22 03:03 AM


How about a hug and an ear will that help?  Maybe that is what you need and not a solution..Bojopy

 

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)


~Venus~
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

4 posted 2000-01-27 07:38 PM


From the way it sounds, it sounds as though the poem isn't about you. Maybe the girl it's about needs someone to comfort her and no one is around to do so. I know I know how that feels.

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

Neala
Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262
Florida, USA
5 posted 2000-01-29 07:12 PM


Hey Venus your right it is about someone else someone very close to me. I can stand there an talk to her but she always feels alone.  Although I know what she means by that just I wish there was something i could do. But there isn't I just keep being there for her.

-Neala
(Goddess of Sadness)

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
6 posted 2000-01-29 07:19 PM


How many times in junior high and high school did every girl feel exactly this way. Wonderfully put into words.
jannel

hathor
Junior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 17

7 posted 2000-01-30 08:02 PM


Neala-
Hey, I really like the poem.  I just have a question for you:  Who is it about?
-hathor


[This message has been edited by hathor (edited 01-30-2000).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2000-02-28 04:45 AM


Nice poem Neala.   I think a mentor could understand what a young girl goes thru or even a girl friend that is a few years older would understand what a younger girl is going thru.  Hope you find an understanding friend.   James
TanAngel
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since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
9 posted 2000-02-28 04:48 PM


I liked this, it struck so close b/c I felt this same way about a friend a while ago...I learned that I cannot control what people tell me no matter how...I wish I knew what they feel...I cannot go into their feelings...

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
10 posted 2000-02-28 06:10 PM


Youc annot go into their feelings, but you can sympathesize or be a shoulder, a light in the darkness.  Well done Neala  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Keli1019
Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31
FL
11 posted 2000-02-28 07:35 PM


I know what it feels like...to try to be there for someone close, and they just push you away. Well, you can't try to get into someone's feelings if they aren't willing to share them with you...
Great poem!!
Can't wait to read the next one!!

 "It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone and a
day to love someone- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone."

~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

12 posted 2000-02-28 08:21 PM


*evil laughter* It is I, I have returned! Again. Sometimes, like just now, I feel like some of these people could be talking about me. Some of my friends have been...well, thinking I was "depressed" lately. I keep telling them I'm fine, even when I may have been slightly down, and thus pushing them away! Arigato, minna, for letting me vent!

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

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