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Vampire'sMistress Junior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 19 |
lying there embracing myself closed eyes waiting for you to loom in gloom * everywhere my flowing mind searching restless for a glaze in evidence confidence come let the black curtain fall around us bind my soul with yours, believe - i wont run away there's no fear no - you wont hear me scream i'm not scared-it's just a true coming dream there's no fright for all i really miss- is the vampire's kiss and soon i can feel your breath on my lips touching me deep givin me creep * can u see the moon defendingthe way for us two and under cover of night starts our flight... _-_-_-_-_-_- High @ll. First of all you will have mentioned that I am brandnew in this forum. I love this one and I am really happy that I'd discovered it. Thx to all of you here - for your great poems! I am not only new here but also in writing "poems" in English. So please let me learn, give me time and perhaps..if there is really something in me (I pray for finding the right words in English)...one day you will enjoy my "poetry" as I enjoy yours. Sorry in advance for all my mistakes. Carpe Noctem, VM |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Greetings and welcome... I think that this is a grand attempt at your words in english...I enjoyed it very much so. Vampire Poetry is my specialty but I have not posted any here for I did not know how it would be excepted. Maybe I will post one that I have written in the past and see what happens...thank you for a good read and for the courage to post what I write best! There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hi VM and welcome to passions. This is kindof nice in a vampire sort of way. I enjoy your poetry right now. Which country are you from or which language is your spoken language? I liked the line "for all I really miss is the vampire's kiss."...James |
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Vampire'sMistress Junior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 19 |
thx to both of you for your warm words...I know now for sure that this forum is more than special... to answer the questions: I'm living in Germany, so I speak mainly German - but my nationality is Spanish. I first thought that I should not write in English, as it is hard to have a real understanding /a real feeling for atmosphere/ a real feeling for internmediate tones ( I hope you know what I mean *g*) bit at least: I love it, I enjoy it - and til anyone is saying: VM! STOP DOING THIS! I will go on.... Nice day , take care VM P.S. It lasts lots of hours to get through all intersting poems...so be sure that you will find my comments in a short time as well under yours! |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I think you have a good handle on the English language. I loved your poem and the way it was written. Just a clue- I am American, know english all my life and I still have problems with it-hehehe- Welecome to America, to Dark Passions. A waiting to read more  |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome indeed. I think you have a great grasp of the english language too. You are going great!! Glad you like the dark forum and our family of friends. I'll be looking for more  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i agree with those before me. i think this is an exceptional first attempt at writing in english. like the saying goes, practice makes perfect. i look forward to more. so, i welcome you and hope you enjoy your time spent here in dark passions! |
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Vampire'sMistress Junior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 19 |
What should I say: I feel really well here. Thx to Isis, kitkat and danny. Whenever you will read some of my lines and have time for a comment, please be honest(ly?), correct what has to be corrected as this is the only chance for me to learn. I red lots of poems here that are really! brilliant - I know that mine is far away from that - but I believe in me and in the future VM |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Good luck figuring out the english language.. I dont even understand it yet and it is my native tounge. Welcome to passions and keep on writing.. this was unbelievable for someone who barely knows the english language! "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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