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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Careless words tear the flesh of memory Paper thin promises echo deeply dark Visions of razor shards etched by shaking hands Into narrow tracings of scarlet following silver Chilling fingers force a fetal curl Faded time festers in remembered wounds Rosy spectacles shatter into unsuspecting eyes Clearer focus views only pain Curiosity did not pry open this gift Hatefulness forced the lid from within And invited his friends to play Games of destruction madness greed Retained, a single drop of hope Lock it tight, Pandora, Hold it safe for me |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done, so true,I enjoyed this. Guard the hope like the precious jewel it is!  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Great piece.. How true...careless words can be forgiven but never forgotten  Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
jannel...do you read mythology too?? i loved it...the beautiful lady pandora...who unleashed sorrow and pain..with only one thing to turn to... hope... very well written... see you around... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Wow! This is so vivid!! BRAVO!! I really hope to read more of your poems soon!!! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i agree. very good. very vivid. a wonderful piece. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Jannel, this is amazing... I'm so glad it got brought back up so I could see it...very good piece work!!!! take care janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Thank you all very much. Jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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Amy J. Renz Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 26Newark, NJ, USA |
I love the story of Pandora, and you captured the essence of the story beautifully. Thankyou for sharing this work, it is exquisite. I am an acquired taste, I'm anchovies. Not everyone likes those hairy little things. Tori Amos |
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