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Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

0 posted 2000-01-18 04:14 PM

Did not I this day look,
with tears in my eyes, at the sky,
wishing I could fly free
only to realize I couldn't?

At the oceans, I looked
wishing I could swim forever-
what is forever? what is life?
I thought to myself.

I made words come forth
not from the mind, but instead the heart-
I looked, at myself and the world,
in my own heart I searched…

I found an empty heart,
darkness and death reigned-
laughing in enmity
while I dissolved in terror-

I felt death in my body,
in my eyes, and I screamed…
where the laughter was, there
was the abyss…

falling forever in the void-
my heart sank to such depths
the oceans couldn't match…

my mind tricked, succumbed,
tripped… forever falling…
in that emptiness…

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

1 posted 2000-01-18 04:30 PM

Superb...I adore the last lines.
And what an attention getter

Jenny Lee

Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2000-01-18 05:43 PM

Excellent Artur...I can relate to the whole poem almost as if I wrote it myself. Although I don't think it would have turned out as well if I had written it.

DE
(Maharet)

"They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

3 posted 2000-01-18 06:07 PM

Hawkwing, how creative and beautiful. WIthout sounding possessed or something you works always deeply speak to me..

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Bojopy
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 391

4 posted 2000-01-19 01:36 AM

Art this was excellent...I thought about Abaddon from the bible. Look it up you'll understand what I mean.

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

5 posted 2000-01-19 01:43 AM

Wonderful piece indeed. I have found those same things when I finally stopped to look within. Funny how it creeps up on you, and how it never really seems to go away completely.

Poetic Sadness
Junior Member

since 2000-01-15

Posts 12
Kelowna, BC, Canada

6 posted 2000-01-19 01:55 AM

Artur Hawkwing: It is almost like you wrote this poem for me alone. So many times I have searched far and wide, and finally within myself. I have found such loneliness and emptiness, then eventually, hopeliness. Sometimes, I've looked so hard that I have even felt like dying. Thank you for putting my soul into your writing.

Sincerely, Heather M.

The things you fear are undefeatable not by their nature, but by your approach.
-Jewel

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