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JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-01-13 07:25 PM

The bus had left the corner
Where she stood,
Clothes soaked with mud
She missed her only way out
Now all that was left to do
Was wait
'Till the next one came again
She wiped away the dirt and grime
And the tears that lingered in her eyes.
Sobbing at passing strangers
Made her feel self conscious
As well as pittiful and pained.
The reason she was here was just...
To get away from it all
A new place
A new life
Where nobody knew her name.
Another body in the crowd
Of passing city strangers
Was really all she wanted to be.
A single bag was at her side
Containing all she needed to surrvive
She opened the latch to retrive some change
That lingered somewhere inside.
Getting up from the curb with newly dried, red eyes and face
She walked to the saxophonist playing a block away,
And placed her last two quarters carefuly
Into the old, beaten, leather case,
And she knew looking at the man from which the passionate music flowed,
There was an image of an un-known tommorow, an image of such silent fear
That matched her very own
Like a broken, one way mirror.

JOY

Shirleeah Storey
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 68
Delaware

1 posted 2000-01-13 08:10 PM

Joy,
I'm speachless right now because your poem has stirred so many emotions in me. This is soooo beautiful. I can actually picture a woman standing there, waiting, crying, everything you've stated. This is a wonderful piece of work.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

2 posted 2000-01-13 11:19 PM

Joy how sad and moving this poem, you are a story teller my friend. I wanted something nice for her, I really did..

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Bojopy
Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 391

3 posted 2000-01-14 04:33 AM

First of all the title was perfect!! The whole thing worked out to be what was supposed to be said and heard!! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!

"Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy)

FreeByrd
Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 267

4 posted 2000-01-14 08:43 AM

Each new piece you've written is better than the last.

Keep it up JOY.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

5 posted 2000-01-14 12:56 PM

Excellent Joy...I felt many emotions that this piece envoked from my soul!!

Jenny Lee

Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

6 posted 2000-01-14 02:43 PM

Thank you all! I'm so very glad you liked this new piece. I enjoyed writing this, mostly because it is kind of like a story isn't it, Isis? And it sparked an image of a woman standing by the curb as clear as day, Shirleeah. It came together so perfectly, Bojopy. I too enjoy each new piece I write, FreeByrd. Finaly, it envoked many emotions for me also, Jenny.

JOY

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