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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
First of all I have to tell why and what this is about. I wrote this about a love gone away. Just a hint her last name was fields! Slowly came into it & slowly leaving it behind Clearing the love FIELDS for someone else to find All those moments & memories in which we shared Has left a lonliness full of raptured despair How in anyway of any day is it's way How in anyway of any day is it's way The one in a life which completes the soul Has only left again to leave a gasping hole Picked..& picking up the pieces she has jilted Trying to wear again those emotions she kilted How in anyway of any day is it's way How in anyway of any day is it's way Slowly came into it & slowly leaving it behind Searching by not searching every word of a rhyme And coming closer to an end of this FIELD To finalize a love & give in....to yield How in anyway of any day is it's way How in anyway of any day is it's way Nothing will erase this & make it all end Only time & another... another loving friend Which of all the ways will give this sign ..... ..... Slowly came into it & slowly leaving it behind < !signature--> "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) [This message has been edited by Bojopy (edited 01-12-2000).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Good poem, Bojopy. I think "Fields" would be a good title. You could expand it to "Fields of Love" or just about any type of field possible but since that the persons name, the title would serve a double purpose this way. Just a suggestion. Michael |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Fields as a title was my first thought But love is perhaps more fitting MY ONE MY LOVE or LOVE OF AGES i dunno Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Nice Poem Poet! Great Format! Love Field...its a place, there was a huge nasty race riot in the 60's...Okay...historian I am not but if you search out Love Field you'll find it! It would definitely get attention |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
I have to disagree with the other suggestions... while I have to admit that I did fall prey to the instinct and think of something to do with a 'field' of some kind, I don't think it (she) was the point of the work, even though she is the topic and the catalyst. I think you've titled it yourself, actually. "Slowly" |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
I have to disagree with the other suggestions... while I have to admit that I did fall prey to the instinct and think of something to do with a 'field' of some kind, I don't think it (she) was the point of the work, even though she is the topic and the catalyst. I think you've titled it yourself, actually. "Slowly" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Ok Bojopy here are some titles... 'Fields of Love' 'Fields of Memory' 'Blossoming Fields of Yesterday' 'Fields of the Heart' Please let me know what you think of them and why??  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Thanks for all the titles and I'm still not sure. I think maybe "Slowly...Love Field....Behind" just might be it what do you think? "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Dammit haze -- I'm going to forever look like I'm licking your boots just because I agree with you -- is this a mind meld or what?  Bojopy -- yep -- Love Field |
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AZRAEL Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 14 |
Like this poem much man, must say though sorry to hear bout this great loss as I do hope you can find someone to share eternity with as I hate seeing people alone. If all who are born were ment to die, I should never have been born, for I shall never die. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Thanks AZ. I'm fine (i think) it just helps to write about things that hurt. I think the title should be "Love FIELD" Anyway all thanks for the responses!! "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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