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Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-12-26 11:56 PM

My innocence has ebbed,
It's former life has passed away,
Now only feelings of dread,
Are the beacons showing me the way.

That innocence has kicked the bucket,
No more a mellow soul,
Because of you I now turn the coin over,
And look for the tarnish below.

It struggles to be born anew,
It labours almost daily,
I want to walk the path of enlightenment,
And lessons learned show you aren't the one to save me.

A life of grief and misery,
Too scared to look into the light,
Is this what you want for me?
I battle for the power to fight.

I can't let you kill it,
I won't let you succeed,
I have already surpassed you thy enemy,
My soul is finally free...

Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas..
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 1999-12-27 12:08 PM

Wow, Isis, yet again, you write an amazing poem. Excellent style! I relate to this poem completely.

* Melissa Honeybee *

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 1999-12-27 07:57 AM

Fly, my friend. . . fly and let your soul sing out. . .

You have already found the way. . .

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

3 posted 1999-12-27 05:44 PM

Thanks MH and Sven, I'm never down for long!!

Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas..
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

4 posted 1999-12-27 08:16 PM

riveting indeed. I especially liked the power in the last stanza. good work!

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 1999-12-27 08:51 PM

Thanks Jaxjoy, I always try to comeback with strength and hope

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

6 posted 1999-12-27 10:38 PM

Stunning work, Isis...

*Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

7 posted 1999-12-28 12:25 PM

Thanks Krista

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Niemczak
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 51

8 posted 1999-12-28 05:47 AM

I really love the power in your words, and the strength of that last verse. You are a true writer and I hope that someday I will be able to match your strength. Thank you for being an inspiration.

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

9 posted 1999-12-29 11:52 AM

My favorite lines were...

"That innocence has kicked the bucket,
No more a mellow soul,
Because of you I now turn the coin over,
And look for the tarnish below."

Good job once again, Isis!

JOY

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

10 posted 1999-12-29 07:11 PM

Thanks Niemczak what a lovely thing to say

Thanks also Joy. Glad everyone liked this angry ol' piece

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Andrew
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since 1999-12-20

Posts 9

11 posted 2000-01-01 08:52 AM

Isis,
In this poem you make out that it is
the thinker that is always right. You do that in alot of your work,but could it be that the looking under the coin is a way of trying to find ways of attacking to cover up
the thinker`s feelings of possible guilt.

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

12 posted 2000-01-01 05:45 PM

Afraid not Andrew!!

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

13 posted 2000-01-02 11:48 AM

I'm glad you found the strength in yourself Isis.....no one can save you but yourself...lesson well learned

Very good piece!!

A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

14 posted 2000-01-02 06:27 PM

We share the same enemy, I too hope I can surpass it. Encouraging words. Well done.

Michael

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

15 posted 2000-01-03 06:03 AM

Thanks Michael, we'll surpass it or die trying

At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

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