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The Pit |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
I awaken, screaming, shaken Brain on fire Stuck in the mire Of a dream too real I still can feel The spasms of death My last rasping breath The flash of sun Report of gun Lying in a hole On another soul Bullets plow through my back Bodies falling in stacks But some aren't dead Though we've been painted red They slam shots through my head I know not how but I witness all of this The pain. Their anger. Death's forever kiss. I'm somehow alive, even in its embrace Why are we victimized? Where is the grace? They don't speak my language. I cannot speak theirs Uttering loud staccato pops, they see through crosshairs I try to shift my arm, but I can't feel it It must have moved, for again I've been hit These men, these monsters, stand on the edge Of our death pit Like a many headed sledge To strike, to slay, to slaughter with no reason We've been struck down, taken out of season A political act? Conquest? A lot of maybes. History repeats itself, weep for the babies. My sweat coats My body like My blood in My dream. I shudder in fear, Alone in the dark, Alone I screamed. DB |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This piece brings some horrifying images to mind for me. Excellent imagery as always, D.B. Michael |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Very painfully real images. I actually cringed reading some of this. Great piece of work. --A Litle Fairy-- |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Yes chilling indeed...what were you describing deep?? "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Ditto to all of the above, back with attitude  What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
David...anger and questioning becomes you. This style is too cool too  Jenny Lee Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Thanks, All! And welcome back Jenny! Your Hospital and Child of Earth were Godlike in their intensity for me. DB |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I hope this does not offend you but I heard music to this!! I thik it was brilliant!!! DB another winner |
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