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Leaving Ashes On The Tongue
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Leaving Ashes On The Tongue |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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I'm not waiting on tomorrow, I'm not wishing on a star, I've lost touch with honest living and I'm wondering how far I can run tonight while you soak in applause and accolades. Ring the bells for all the dancers bring the house lights up a bit, there's a full life wrapped around you and I'm too awkward for the fit. I'm not waiting on the sunshine, I'm not wishing on a dream, if I am gone this time tomorrow I will have just slipped through a seam. When the curtain calls are over don't bother looking in the shade pluck the tinsel from your hair, show the world you've got it made, don't turn around to find me just walk on I won't be there I've swept the cobwebs from my heart, life begins again tomorrow perhaps to each a brand new start. ©2004 by icebox |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox This starts out so sad and final, but ends with hope and new beginnings. After reading it several times and feeling tearful for you, I realized the ending was good for you, and smiled. Well done!  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
moving on can be so difficult sometimes, but its liberating..and that feels gooood  loved this poem |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes the way I feel, but not so final yet |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
There is always uncertainty in tomorrows..they need a new name. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You have the staying power, and it's a certainty that no seam can swallow you. You'll get to where you're going, though where that may be is hard to see from a distance. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I agree with ole Willy, too -- that it's all a play. Obviously, you don't like the spotlight and I understand that feeling. But, I do hope you hang around here. ........jo |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is full of the best images-I like it. Standing in the wings is no place for you. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
One door closes and another opens... love the positive outlook at the end. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
icebox, I liked this very much. I enjoyed the movement,imagery, and contrasts. Your writing carried me there. Sadelite |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
icebox...Touching with a ray of hope for a better tomorrow. Well written. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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