Open Poetry #32 |
Hunting One's Own Soul. |
Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Here in the forest of hunt, I search for my soul, armed with metaphysical weaponry.. I scream in the wind, "It's better this way".. It echos me, from all directions, mocking my order, keeping me from sanity. Knocking me down into the corpses of birch. In a solid perspective, I realize it's better off gone, long dead.... Protecting my strength from myself is a neverending war, a loss of speech and language.. I can no longer speak to myself, and come to terms with the illness. On my left side lies impurity, thoughts that slip off my tongue like poison, words I've said that should never have been spoken, crimes of the mind that disallow buoyance choking the world on my tears and my surface so easily scratched.. Soon, all will be infected. It is better this way, I could say it with fire and I could scream it to the sky, I could heave it through walls with hands of silk.. and still it would echo in discontent. I cannot save myself. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can say I understand the feeling, the sadness...but never in a million years could have written it the way you have here |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
wow I cannot save myself either |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Meg, (I hope I got the name right LOL) You are truly a very talented individual, I wouldn't hesitate to say that you are on par with histories best poets. Your style reminds me of another great poet whom used to (and may still for all I know) posts on this site named Michael Anderson. You can find his some of his work HERE |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nodding here. I just read your thread on dream interpretation too, and this also reminded me of symbolism, myth, archetype and collective unconscious. This poem in particular reminded me of the cycle of growth depicted in "The Hero's Journey". Enjoyed this much, and thanks for the thoughts it provoked. (oh--you might want to read some of that--Carl Jung--Memories, Dreams, and Reflections, The Joseph Campbell/Bill Moyers interview is another great start--The Power of Myth--and right now I'm reading Stephan Larsen, The Mythic Imagination--YUMMY stuff!) Be well, lady. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
your words of desperation weigh heavy as bricks that sink inside but o so powerful and so much spoken courageiously for those who cannot echo their own |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kaoru This search is what life is all about...through all the pain and exileration, like this marvelous poem. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
your very powerfull with your words. i like how you write how you feel. i know how you feel,been there, don't want to go back. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Amazing! Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kaoru, good poem. But, I don't think you're losing your soul. A very wise man once said, "it must out" -- meaning all the garbage has to come out for that clean bright soul to shine! Enjoyed reading. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
choking the world on my tears and my surface so easily scratched.. A most soulful and sensitive write, Kaoru~ Saving ourselves from ourselves makes it hard to draw the line. Hugs you~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write...deep thoughts.. Love your work Meg. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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GlisteningRain Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 103The clouds |
you always write uniquely. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very remarkable imagery! It's good to look for one's soul and to discover who we are. You shine. Love, Margherita |
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