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the day creeps up and undresses you (lighthouse series - scene 7)
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the day creeps up and undresses you (lighthouse series - scene 7) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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so now the day creeps up and undresses you you are left alone except for discarded stilettos and rubber sheaths worn only by men how you will cry with rage… call the night the mother of all dogs for she has taken your lovers your long-legged garments and whining wombs you are full of salt-mist that brittle cry of pantyhose nothing is left now lighthouse save the sound of gulls the soft slap of waves born from under you and the tales of legendary mermaids 300404 What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
for she has taken your lovers your long-legged garments and whining wombs you are full of salt-mist that brittle cry of pantyhose =============================== whoa...thats some way cool imagery... cutting edge poetry here Maree-girl... very very cool. (love your sig)Alanis is queen girlie-girl. LOL  The ink bleeds through cuz you're paper thin |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
woah....this is wow-able...very nice, very gritty...loved it!  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
nothing is left now lighthouse save the sound of gulls the soft slap of waves born from under you and the tales of legendary mermaids ''' ~ the series was beautiful, this was a "perfect" ending....the image very vivid! ~~**~~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
sighs |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's good when you outdo yourself! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The best of the best, Maree...Inspired writing! |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Maree, this is outstanding. I'm going to find all the others and read them as well. ~Tier{R.T.} |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You just keep surpassing yourself. shaking my head here... I say it again, you are all the more lovely for not understanding just how beautiful you truly are...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
always enjoy your free verse amazing |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I think this is fascinating...I love the imagery and will have to look for the rest to put it into context! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Maree, I have so enjoyed your shoreline and lighthouse paintings -- and this one is no exception!  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the enchantment of the seas sets sail upon your words |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a world you paint! TD |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, this is certainly a poem to feel again...  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Tremendous write! Very much enjoyed |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
exemplary writing, Maree... Regards sudhir |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Again, this one has flesh, to really get your teeth into, bloody and raw. its the only way I can describe it... the day creeps up and undersses you.... love,love,love this line. genius. library. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing...simply amazing!!! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Intriguing read… JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maree, your writing is truly beautiful. I love the way you paint pictures with your words. Hugs, Ethel |
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