Stopping by the Stream ZZ2

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Open Poetry #32

Stopping by the Stream ZZ2

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2004-04-30 05:34 AM

The mountains are far away,
Feet tread the road many days;
Rain comes and then goes
Off my wide brim flows;
The swollen stream plays
Over rocks that shows.

I sit beside the quick stream
Thoughts drift into a daydream
Of flowers and lace
Of another place
Sadder than it seems
Now gone with no trace.

A penny is tossed in a wish
Disturbing not even fish
For there is no pool
The water is cool
No resting is this
Torrent for a fool.

I follow the water flowing
To a place where it’s slowly
Water calm and clear
With a meadow near
Where flowers growing
And the spirit cheers.

Gloom

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2004-04-30 08:41 AM

I liked the flowing thought and rhyme in this. It trickled along perfectly. It had great balance to it, a little sadness, but a calm and contentness. Looking forward to more of Double z.
Sadelite

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2004-04-30 08:53 AM

Thank you, Sadelite
Pleased you enjoyed,
Always a pleasure to see your words

Gloom

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-04-30 02:28 PM

*click*

library

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2004-04-30 05:15 PM

YEAH...what PS said...
Click...

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-04-30 06:55 PM

Reminds me of the Loggins & Messina song, Watching The River Run -- liked very much!

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