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Soft Petals Landing
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Soft Petals Landing |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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You are the song inside my soul when I awake from quiet river before me I see: A world in motion beautiful under snow for a moment you entered the naked soul running it was more then that: stars had fallen separating black&light I laid my head back down sleeping in a dream to watch The moon rise again with her pale innocence soft strokes in a whisper of mercy searching for the lost Tonight, I wish I could bring down the stars-- for you to touch sounds of melody wandering down as they do soft petals landing Tonight, I might escape to the waters with his shadow of guitar filling nights sky with flesh of his fingers A journey of light rain -- in rebirth tracing patterns along bare hills His storm brought me to this: deepening the river of night up to the edge of everything ~~ ~~**~~ The way you move me I walk with your shadow With your silhouette Leave the light on It always comes Back to you ~~**~~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow… too good for words. Excellent! JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
As always Lauren...Exquisite!! Love ya pretty lady~
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
The beauty of your words shine like the flame of a full moon.... |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"Tonight, I wish I could bring down the stars-- for you to touch sounds of melody wandering down as they do soft petals landing Tonight, I might escape to the waters with his shadow of guitar filling nights sky with flesh of his fingers" ~ [double]sigh... Your writings never cease to please me. I loved this part, especially. Pure writing perfection. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
the images of your poetry engulfs me and I reread them over and over and enjoy it all so very much - thanks - Paul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moon rise again with her pale innocence soft strokes in a whisper of mercy searching for the lost Tonight, I wish I could bring down the stars-- for you to touch sounds of melody wandering down as they do soft petals landing Tonight, I might escape to the waters with his shadow of guitar filling nights sky with flesh of his fingers A journey of light rain -- in rebirth tracing patterns along bare hills His storm brought me to this: deepening the river of night up to the edge of everything ================================== Lordy girlie...ya make it hard to pick fave lines in this one...the imagery is stunning..the ethereal essence of it is exquisite...the personifications make it hauntingly beautiful, blended toether it becomes pure poetic seduction at its most lovely. Lauren...your muse and pen is enchanting.   The ink bleeds through cuz you're paper thin |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I could sit down with a book of just your writings and be content for hours... You are truly an amazing writer.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
and what a storm it must have been |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Truly beautiful... any other words fail me.. Pepper |
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