Fortune lives, reality forgives.

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Open Poetry #32

Fortune lives, reality forgives.

PhictiousReality
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since 2004-04-10

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0 posted 2004-04-29 04:43 AM

Fortune lives, reality forgives.
It's as if, your catching souls a drift.
You pull, and they expect a gift.
You fall, but they don't lift?

Expect, they want you to be per-fect.
Deny that, in us all, that's a fact.
Pollitically corrct, to me, does not effect.
Live for you, as if your child knew?

In dreams I have flew.
Breathed underwater, under non spoken societys clue.
Fallen, hit the ground.
Realized, it's my dream I have found, It's god I wrap around.

What I lack.
I want to understand, forget mainstrem fact.
The only reason why I react.
It's what I lack, perfection, to learn from all.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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1 posted 2004-04-29 04:51 AM

the only part that I stumble over is

"In dreams I have flew"

That is incorrect grammer.

Try one of these to make the flow better...

In dreams I flew
or
In dreams I have flown

PhictiousReality
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since 2004-04-10

Posts 4

2 posted 2004-04-29 05:14 AM

Point taken. Thank you.

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