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Ratleader
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0 posted 2004-04-26 03:01 PM



There’s A Hole In The World


there’s a hole in the world
a hole

things are falling through
biplanes and plaques,
girls on bikes
cigarettes and swing sets in parks

whole roads slicking down
it like overcooked spaghetti

a hole
there’s a hole in the world

and oh grandstands I guess

BB’s and babies and movie cameos
going down,
saw horses all a’kilter
poodles with frizzy pink hair

they all dive like grebes
and don’t come up

through the hole in the world
the hole
that eats bullfighters
and magazines, torpedoes and all

I saw a drill press and
a cultured lady
looking good all the way down
to no gurgle

because there’s a hole
a hole
and it feels like
the whole world


© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-04-26 03:04 PM


There's also a song
by this title...

I remember them playing it
when John Ritter died...

now I'll have that tune
in my head
all day...

A good poem, Sir.

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2004-04-26 03:20 PM


there’s a hole in the world...sure feels like it around here~~~

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3 posted 2004-04-26 03:49 PM


RatL -- have to agree, somehow.  This was so visual!    
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4 posted 2004-04-26 03:53 PM


Some days it just feels that way Ed.
Well done.

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

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5 posted 2004-04-26 04:16 PM


Hi RL
Must be related to the sock eater, the pen eater and things that just disappear in that little ole hole in the world.
Bon-Bon

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6 posted 2004-04-26 05:25 PM


What's in the hole? A never ending drop? Or does everything that falls in it, fall ontop of everything else? China? Hm?

lol.

Honestly, this gave me one of the best mental pictures I've ever seen. It also makes me think about this character in a movie I once saw that said something to the extent of, "So, you're cursed. So what? So's the whole damn world".

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7 posted 2004-04-26 07:34 PM


Ed~
You did this so well that I felt myself falling~

Sometimes that hole just sucks us all in~
Excellent thought provoker, sir~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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8 posted 2004-04-26 07:42 PM


and were all doomed together, isnt that nice?
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9 posted 2004-04-26 10:22 PM


yup
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10 posted 2004-04-26 10:35 PM


Well I guess that explains why I always seem to be falling...

I would rather my words fall upon deaf ears than a closed mind...

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11 posted 2004-04-27 01:45 PM


Your incredibly vivid images sucked me in... a fall I took most willingly. *S* I love the way you juxtapose the trivial and transcendent... all subject to the same slide... all equally helpless to escape.

Magnificent writing, my friend!!!

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12 posted 2004-04-27 02:07 PM


WEll, I would agree with Suthern, except I don't know what the hell all that means...but, I think that "hole" all dumps on me....good write Rat....
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13 posted 2004-04-27 05:51 PM


Ed

Sometimes it feels just like that to me too.  Wonderful use of imagery to convey a feeling...poignant and desolate.  

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14 posted 2004-04-29 11:42 AM


damn
yes

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15 posted 2004-04-29 02:53 PM


Great write!

Eric

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16 posted 2004-06-19 11:06 AM


"I'm fixing a hole where the rain gets in"
Great write, Rat

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17 posted 2004-06-19 12:23 PM


Love the imagination of this. I can see them slipping.  Much enjoyed.

  Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

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18 posted 2004-06-19 01:21 PM


yeah

good piece

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19 posted 2004-06-19 07:03 PM


Sad to say there does seem to be a hole in the world. Well done.
Sandra

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20 posted 2004-06-19 08:20 PM


Amazing writing, Ratleader.  I remember reading this before-it left an impression then, and, again, a dent.  I'm glad it came up again because I wanted to respond to it.
The imagery you chose to create a hole was perfect, the things dearest such as swingsets and those little kiddies that would be on them.
          Sadelite

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21 posted 2004-06-23 10:27 AM


This carries like a wind tunnel with no way out.

Hard not to get caught up by the intense force.
Good stuff,  Ed~

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22 posted 2004-06-23 10:44 AM


so much truth in these words and yes Sunshine is correct, there is a song titled as this and the Eagles do it.  It is one of my favorite songs and is also full of truth.
Very very well done sir.

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23 posted 2004-06-23 12:13 PM


nice
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24 posted 2004-06-23 12:21 PM


Gosh, it sure as dickens feels that way at times! Whirling, swirling images of people and things ~ and our values and virtures! ~ being sucked into a deep and dark vortex!

This reminds me of something funny that happened to me when I was a teenager. My Dad read to our family, a Ripley's Believe It Or Not article, that a preacher had been singing "When the roll is called up yonder, I'll be there" as he walked down the middle of a road. Suddenly, the earth trembled, the road gaped open and he disappeared into the cravass.

Well, the next day, as soon as we sat down in church, the preacher announces that our first hymn was to be, "When the Roll Is Called Up Yonder". As he started singing, our pew shook as my whole family broke into gales of hysterical laughter. ~ Everyone, except for my Mom who was absolutely mortified as she had not heard the article that my Dad had read to the rest of us!

Sorry that I got off on a wild tangent. Your fascinating poem reminded me of that incident!

~ Take care in where you step! lol
Linda


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25 posted 2004-06-23 05:06 PM


I like how you tie this all together in the end, Ratleader!
Corinne

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