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There's A Hole In The World
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There's A Hole In The World |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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There’s A Hole In The World there’s a hole in the world a hole things are falling through biplanes and plaques, girls on bikes cigarettes and swing sets in parks whole roads slicking down it like overcooked spaghetti a hole there’s a hole in the world and oh grandstands I guess BB’s and babies and movie cameos going down, saw horses all a’kilter poodles with frizzy pink hair they all dive like grebes and don’t come up through the hole in the world the hole that eats bullfighters and magazines, torpedoes and all I saw a drill press and a cultured lady looking good all the way down to no gurgle because there’s a hole a hole and it feels like the whole world |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There's also a song by this title... I remember them playing it when John Ritter died... now I'll have that tune in my head all day... A good poem, Sir. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
there’s a hole in the world...sure feels like it around here~~~ M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL -- have to agree, somehow. This was so visual!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Some days it just feels that way Ed. Well done. To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Hi RL Must be related to the sock eater, the pen eater and things that just disappear in that little ole hole in the world. Bon-Bon  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
What's in the hole? A never ending drop? Or does everything that falls in it, fall ontop of everything else? China? Hm? lol. Honestly, this gave me one of the best mental pictures I've ever seen. It also makes me think about this character in a movie I once saw that said something to the extent of, "So, you're cursed. So what? So's the whole damn world". |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ You did this so well that I felt myself falling~ Sometimes that hole just sucks us all in~ Excellent thought provoker, sir~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and were all doomed together, isnt that nice? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
yup |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Well I guess that explains why I always seem to be falling... I would rather my words fall upon deaf ears than a closed mind... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your incredibly vivid images sucked me in... a fall I took most willingly. *S* I love the way you juxtapose the trivial and transcendent... all subject to the same slide... all equally helpless to escape. Magnificent writing, my friend!!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
WEll, I would agree with Suthern, except I don't know what the hell all that means...but, I think that "hole" all dumps on me....good write Rat.... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Sometimes it feels just like that to me too. Wonderful use of imagery to convey a feeling...poignant and desolate. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
damn  yes |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write! Eric |
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Fagin Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 126Ca |
"I'm fixing a hole where the rain gets in" Great write, Rat |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Love the imagination of this. I can see them slipping. Much enjoyed. SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah good piece |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sad to say there does seem to be a hole in the world. Well done. Sandra |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Amazing writing, Ratleader. I remember reading this before-it left an impression then, and, again, a dent. I'm glad it came up again because I wanted to respond to it. The imagery you chose to create a hole was perfect, the things dearest such as swingsets and those little kiddies that would be on them. Sadelite |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This carries like a wind tunnel with no way out. Hard not to get caught up by the intense force. Good stuff, Ed~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
so much truth in these words and yes Sunshine is correct, there is a song titled as this and the Eagles do it. It is one of my favorite songs and is also full of truth. Very very well done sir. |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
nice |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Gosh, it sure as dickens feels that way at times! Whirling, swirling images of people and things ~ and our values and virtures! ~ being sucked into a deep and dark vortex! This reminds me of something funny that happened to me when I was a teenager. My Dad read to our family, a Ripley's Believe It Or Not article, that a preacher had been singing "When the roll is called up yonder, I'll be there" as he walked down the middle of a road. Suddenly, the earth trembled, the road gaped open and he disappeared into the cravass. Well, the next day, as soon as we sat down in church, the preacher announces that our first hymn was to be, "When the Roll Is Called Up Yonder". As he started singing, our pew shook as my whole family broke into gales of hysterical laughter. ~ Everyone, except for my Mom who was absolutely mortified as she had not heard the article that my Dad had read to the rest of us! Sorry that I got off on a wild tangent. Your fascinating poem reminded me of that incident!  ~ Take care in where you step! lol Linda |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I like how you tie this all together in the end, Ratleader! Corinne |
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