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Wasps and Mice |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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As I sat here writing a letter tonight I was interrupted by a wasp Busily pounding out an S.O.S Against the window above my desk And I wondered What promise compelled him Into my shack in the first place Is he, perhaps, a small winged Magellan Seeking to expand the universe he knows And what now Drives him to abandon his explorations In such a desperate fashion? Maybe he has remembered leaving a roast in the oven Or now, simply misses someone’s face And what of the mouse That scurries off to work with his briefcase Across the kitchen counter in a March Hare hurry Leaving his love to settle the children Safely behind the drywall or under the stove Does he think this dwelling, prison or palace? An old yellow dog lives here as well Presently reposed in a comfortable curl In her usual place on a chair by the woodstove But looking as if she is resigned to her fate Of living with vermin that steals food from her bowl Flying annoyances that buzz her awake And a man that believes this shack on a river Is the loneliest place that he can imagine |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Is he, perhaps, a small winged Magellan Seeking to expand the universe he knows And what now Drives him to abandon his explorations In such a desperate fashion? Maybe he has remembered leaving a roast in the oven Or now, simply misses someone’s face" Only someone who truly felt loneliness, could ponder the same from an insect. Very cool write Ed.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well I was smiling until the end... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'll come back to this, again... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
your writing is always so interesting; you take something small and common and continue building upon it until very significant; I like your style very much. Sadie |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Such imagery of the ordinary...yet you cause pause and wonder...how oft and how much I failed to miss that perhaps is not really there... Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Wranx -- an amazing write! Once when I was visiting a friend of mine and we were having coffee at his table, I noticed a beautiful red Cardinal banging against his window trying to fly through. He just kept trying. When I asked about it, my friend said he had been doing it every morning for two weeks. Now, why would he do that? Perhaps, you've answered my question. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You just broke a witch's broken heart. sigh. hugs yeti. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
deep thoughts run all through this....nicely said sir... ~~**~~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx With such a keen mind, be careful you don't cut yourself. LOL |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ed?... ...just  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You write distinctly, and all your own.. I read this knowing you wrote it, and still don't expect half of the things I've come across.. The end hits hard, and though it may push and hurt and we may end up on the ground, it's amazing all the same. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
 Bro.Mxx What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Ed, I like the way you weave this with your flowing imagination. It is a bit sad in the end there, perhaps the owner can see some beauty in this shack, this existence? Corinne |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow, good write my friend...personally wouldn't mind a little of that kind of loneliness.... jwesley |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
this one cut to bone. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
..you..you..well..you have done it again. you are a hauntingly beautiful writer |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Thoughts to ponder on a warm summer evening. Listening to insects of the night and wondering of their life. Cool poem. Bon-Bon  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
even a place that is beautiful can feel alone..and it has nothing to do with whether or not you are surrounded by people or contemplating a wasp... nicely written Ed... |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
I wonder if the wasp or the mouse ever thinks the same about the human that stares at them ? This is the first time i have read your poetry and i do love it  |
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