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Clay and Blank-Walls |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Clay and Blank-Walls From My Journals ~~~~ The deepest longing can shape you taking form beneath fragile fingers a stroke of words comfort - desire mere reflections in midnights whisper I miss my youth - my time of you- now blended in a larger novel of unshaped clay and blank walls - a figure never given to wind for its right to stand alone and be admired Today the water is green and bronze glistening all colors in leaves and dieing trees under moon the land shows no mercy nor does my heart At night he comes to me sometimes in the softest places rainstorms and wind – the echo of clocks places, just out of reach of my finding again I curse such nature for being so raw and exposed leaving me in its wake My sorrow will scatter in winters first fall frozen and suspended long after candles have melted and branches unfold their green eyes and jealous limbs Now, I believe, each touching in dark will cradle my escape just - before your shadow greets me for love or something greater but- Tonight I must be selfish and leave the window closed - letting the sea remain empty with a taste of salt for each ache I feel from your passing ~~ 1965-1992 ~~**~~ The way you move me I walk with your shadow With your silhouette Leave the light on It always comes Back to you ~~**~~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I miss my youth - my time of you- now blended in a larger novel of unshaped clay and blank walls - a figure never given to wind for its right to stand alone and be admired Today the water is green and bronze glistening all colors in leaves and dieing trees under moon the land shows no mercy nor does my heart" This reminds me of a photograph I saw today. JM took it. I'll tell her to send it to you. Enjoyed Lauren.  |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Sigh...this was wonderful...I read it again and again... Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
You paint the wind Lauren... Always such vivid silence in your writing. Namaste |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Truly beautiful! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's okay to be selfish |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
such vivid imagery - such deep feeling - such wonderful poetry - you do it superbly - Paul |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
yes..there was silence.. with only the sound of the wind and the ocean to break the spell. Beautiful as you are....hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
~ I first had to get past that striking new photo... damn! "My sorrow will scatter in winters first fall frozen and suspended long after candles have melted and branches unfold their green eyes and jealous limbs" ~ And then the words, especially to me this verse, equaled the beauty behind them. ~ You may never know how much your words remeind me of Opeth... in fact because of your words, I am compelled to print these words... for you, Lauren... although they are not mine: In the name of desperation I call your name A lamentation I sigh Again and again Spiritual eclipse The gateways are closed for me to seek The night... A veil of stars, watching My shadow is born from light The light of the eye, in darkness Over troubled waters memories soar Endlessly, searching night and day The moonlight caresses a lonely hill With the calmness of a whisper I wear a naked soul A blank face in the streaming water It is cold in here Frost scar my coat with dust Eyes attach to your mute portrait We spoke only through thoughts Together we gazed, awaited Hours brought thirst and the rising sun Sunbirds leave their dark recesses Shadows glid the archways Do not turn your face towards me Confronting me with my loneliness You are in a forest unknown The secret orchard And your voice is vast and achromatic But still so precious Lullaby of the crescent moon took you Mesmerized, its kaleidoscopic face Granted you a hollow stare Another soul within the divine herd insert incredible riff along with the lyrics I have kept it The amaranth symbol Hiddin inside the golden shrine Until we rejoice in the meadow Of the end When we both walk the shadows It will set ablaze and vanish Black rose immortal It is getting dark again Dusk shuffle across the fields The evening trees moan as if they knew At night I always dream of you "I have gone away. The bed is cold and empty. Trees bend their boughs toward the earth. And nighttime birds float as black faces. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Every image laments the loss -- lovely, sad, beautiful.  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, another beauty from your journal... written from your heart.I love the poem and your new photo. Both show your beauty, my friend.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The deepest longing can shape you taking form beneath fragile fingers ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I can not move past your opening lines, I am held to them......that thought...and all it emcompasses, is both emotionally and poetically profound. I miss my youth - my time of you- now blended in a larger novel of unshaped clay and blank walls - ~a figure never given to wind for its right to stand alone and be admired~ Today the water is green and bronze glistening all colors in leaves and dieing trees under moon the land shows no mercy nor does my heart ~ At night he comes to me sometimes in the softest places rainstorms and wind – the echo of clocks places, just out of reach of my finding again I curse such nature for being so raw and exposed leaving me in its wake~ My sorrow will scatter in winters first fall frozen and suspended long after candles have melted and branches unfold their green eyes and jealous limbs ~Now, I believe, each touching in dark will cradle my escape just - before your shadow greets me for love or something greater~ but- Tonight I must be selfish and leave the window closed - letting the sea remain empty with a taste of salt for each ache I feel from your passing ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I pasted the whole poem here with the intentions of editing some out and then my usual of highlighting the verses that were my fave...I am unable to edit any of it out...each verse belongs TO the other... each word breathes with the one before and after...and then as one...they sigh this.... ~for love or something greater~ yeeessssssssssssssss ... exactly ........ (ykikyk)   |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Duncan~ Thank you for stopping by, I appreciate your visit... ~ azblond~ thank you...for stopping by as well....I appreciate your thoughts ~ Local Rebel~ 'vivid silence' yes, thank you for that... ~ Grover~ truly thank you...nice to see you... ~ Dixie~ every now and then I have to be, thank you for understanding....hugsss lady ~ Paul~ I enjoyed your comment sir -- much thanks... ~ Nancy~ such a sweet silence, thank you and loveya pretty lady! ~ Mike~ I emailed you..sigh..  thank you for the lovely response ... ~ iliana~ I appreciate you taking time to read.....thanks much dear.. ~ Ethel~ my journals are long and full....thank you much lady luv ya ~ JM~ yes for love or greater....sigh Ikykik...yes you do and the picture sigh ever lovely as your heart and reply....thank you for being you!  ~~**~~ The way you move me I walk with your shadow With your silhouette Leave the light on It always comes Back to you ~~**~~ |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"Mike ~ I emailed you..sigh.. thank you for the lovely response ..." ~ You are welcome, Lauren... and thanks for the e-mail sampler  |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Tonight I must be selfish and leave the window closed - letting the sea remain empty with a taste of salt for each ache I feel from your passing ~*~ |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
long after candles have melted and branches unfold their green eyes  nicey |
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