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man does not live |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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that shadow gonna follow gonna follow now it am to that rest to that rest i am gonna urn it don't deserve it to come there to follow me but it gonna come too cause there I shall go one day I am there to be and we all shall too and the places of that shadow where it fell to earth the places where it darkened on the grass and concrete those places gonna be bright with sun but that shadow gonna still be dark with me it am a short time that my shadow am to walk it am a short time for all the shadows while we am here in our laconic interval it am a damn shame that the best the very best the only best thing there am am to be in the shadow of a friend but we wander round in the hot sun to till and labor for bread to till and labor for bread again and bread don't love us yes sir it am a damn shame that we spend our sweat drippin wet on that damn shadow we make ourselves to be when what makes us best just lay out there to grow however it may or will in the weeds |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
drippin wet on that damn shadow we make ourselves to be when what makes us best just lay out there to grow however it may or will in the weeds Great close, always admire your words |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
Does man exist or just thinks he does.... an interesting write and style.. |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
incredibly unique and innovative style, i love it...you do it so well, too. thanks for the great words. joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"it don't deserve it to come there to follow me but it gonna come too cause there I shall go one day" . . . the fate of it all |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds of an old spiritual... deep from the heart. As always, you have my admiration, saying IWIHWT... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
touching words, LR in an accent that brings it home... "cause there I shall go one day" M |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
and the places of that shadow where it fell to earth the places where it darkened on the grass and concrete those places gonna be bright with sun but that shadow gonna still be dark with me it am a short time that my shadow am to walk it am a short time for all the shadows Nobody preaches it quite like you do, my friend. Very, very good writing, Reb, that stays in the mind and the heart of the reader...... Hugs,  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
profound...yes |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i am the growing weed but who wants me? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dems weeds spreads shadows all over da place! Kill dems weeds! Kill dems all! ~ and let there be Light!  EA |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
The difference between a weed and a flower is relative. what is wanted and what is not. It is hard to be rejected and then lost in the world of rejection. Then Hiding, because of the fear of rejection. Sigh... right now I am climbing my way out. yep. One day I will be Juju the flower. Almost there.(Smiles) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
ok karilea -- I give.. what's the acronym??  thanks very much to all -- it am not the best damn pome I ever writ... but it's the best one I writ this week.. Michelle -- I don't (do not) believe that at all... you're a wild flower. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
maybe its not a weed amongst the roses...maybe the rose is a weed amongst the dandelions....perception sometimes the shadow is cool shade...  when we need hiding from the sun really enjoyed this write |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LR Ya know...this just got to me...the style and unique you, and the meaning behind it all. Wonderful! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I Wish I Had Written This...  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
What did you think it meant, Reb? LOL the "IWIHWT"....... I had to come back to copy this so that I can study it. Why? Because IWIHWT, too!!  Hugs, Ethel |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
reminds me of a few sermons I have heard..from old men who as dark as the shadow you speak of, rose to speak their hearts.... well done sir... as usual |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok....................................................................................................... I don't get it....I mean I read the words and can understand the poem on the surface, but I don't understand what lies deeper??? what you aren't really saying but yet are... *drums fingers and waits for an explanation* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
those places gonna be bright with sun but that shadow gonna still be dark with me Kinda hard to shake it some days, but dayumm if the sun doesn't warm my soul. Nice writing, Reb~ |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i feel what you are saying, i see whats in the shadows, i try not to believe, my heart breaks, as i know what i need to do, the timeing, the fears, the acceptance nice write,thanks |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i must give it more thought, but wanted to let you know that i read and enjoyed it. -majnu |
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