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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2004-04-22 09:30 AM

Come Home to Promise

How many tiers
might there be,
if I were to sketch a line or two, from
these vacated, hollow feelings?

It happens like this
after you leave.

Like silk veils, the layers drape
with cool caress, toning skin
which now feels rough
without your touch.

Was it you
who traced my hand,
leavening aged lines into youth
once more, rippling to passion’s extreme
these shuddering emotions,
then slowly drawing
my breath
into your lungs?

Yes.

Admittedly we are but a shell,
akin to a fine vase, perhaps, filled
with seasonal flowers
fully watered in the spring,
middling with summer’s levels,
rivulets flowing as fall winds
whisper long ago promises

as the water’s level,
dips low
to the point where dried husks
and empty pods
no longer require
moisture…

                              but remember, I do not ask
                                     if you love me, for I know you do
                                                I only ask that I may repeat myself
                                                            to you, endlessly…

Come home soon
that I may welcome you again
with these, my tiers of promise.

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2004-04-22 10:07 AM

"Like silk veils, the layers drape
with cool caress, toning skin
which now feels rough
without your touch."

"but remember, I do not ask
                                     if you love me, for I know you do
                                                I only ask that I may repeat myself
                                                            to you, endlessly…"

this is lovely

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

2 posted 2004-04-22 10:27 AM

Enjoyed!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-04-22 10:41 AM

Simply lovely dear Lady~
My eyes have been missing your words.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2004-04-22 11:25 AM

How many tiers
might there be,
if I were to sketch a line or two, from
these vacated, hollow feelings?

It happens like this
after you leave.

Like silk veils, the layers drape
with cool caress, toning skin
which now feels rough
without your touch.

Was it you
who traced my hand,
leavening aged lines into youth
once more, rippling to passion’s extreme
these shuddering emotions,
then slowly drawing
my breath
into your lungs?
==============================

but remember, I do not ask
                                     if you love me, for I know you do
                                                I only ask that I may repeat myself
                                                            to you, endlessly…

Come home soon
that I may welcome you again
with these, my tiers of promise.
=====================================

Lady.. this makes me wanna shout..IWIHWT!!!
high inspire poetess in white!!

... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ...
the light changes when you're in the room.

M.B.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-04-22 12:19 PM

wonderful free verse!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

6 posted 2004-04-22 04:52 PM

but remember, I do not ask
                                     if you love me, for I know you do
                                                I only ask that I may repeat myself
                                                            to you, endlessly…

Ahh Lady, a beautiful write indeed.

Enjoyed.

Maree

Have you any dreams you'd like to sell?

Stevie Nicks

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2004-04-24 12:33 PM

Ah, the Lady with the name of one of my favourite movies, Lady In White, returns. I am swept away with the magic of your words... You have been sorely missed.

Love & White Light, Dear Lady!
EA

jennirey
Member

since 2002-01-24

Posts 198
North Richland HillsTx

8 posted 2004-04-24 12:47 PM

I have felt these same feelings, yet you have painted them into a magical tapestrry. I hope your Love object comes home to you soon. Thank you for sharing

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

9 posted 2004-05-17 01:17 PM

Words of beauty and majesty fill these responses, but they may be inadequate. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2004-05-17 03:03 PM

I love free verse like this! Glad this came back up

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2004-05-19 01:10 AM

A joy to read...James

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

12 posted 2004-05-20 10:12 PM

This would bring Odysseus home.

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