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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2004-07-03 12:05 PM

In a nearly antique gold picture frame
chipped in one corner and hanging askew
the face of a lady stares back at me
from a beautiful background of stars.

I can see wavy lines distorting the truth
along the eyes, half over the lips,
and extending across one exposed breast.

I move closer in, hone in on the eyes,
and surely I hear a voice whisper to me
as if to plead make good and repair
her picture un-perfect exposed to the world.

Where to begin?
Perhaps in the eyes I’d paint a smile,
the lips maybe red vibrant and full,
and her breast I’d cover with a handprint.

Better but still she inclined to the side,
the right I believe, as if she would fall
the minute I breathed.

I stopped my breath halfway in my chest
and held it still between life and death
till suddenly there crept under my skin
a tingling sensation of living again.

Now gone is the picture un-perfect with stars
from the nearly antique golden frame
but the access point of the chip is still there
for when she is done thinking of love
the way I’m inclined to do,
to the right I believe, until it is me
staring out from a background of stars.

If you too have a frame hanging askew
only seen in the light of insight
you must have stared one night in your sleep
at the unblinking eyes of your soul!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2004-07-03 12:08 PM

Helen

"If you too have a frame hanging askew
only seen in the light of insight
you must have stared one night in your sleep
at the unblinking eyes of your soul!"

Understanding this, Helen...Have seen mine, yes, but she is more beautiful then I realized.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2004-07-03 12:19 PM

Hi, Martie - perhaps we grow into beauty as we incorporate into ourselves that which was into that which is. The process I believe will continue ... until the picture is perfect - absolutely perfect. I know I have a long way still to go.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-07-03 12:44 PM

each verse, each line, gives something to the poem to make it what it is, so I can't pick a favorite....

good write *sigh*

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2004-07-03 01:50 PM

A poem par-excellence! ~ and I enjoyed your insightful reply to Martie!

Yeppers! We're all works in progress!

EA

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2004-07-03 02:26 PM

This poem is a gem. One that should
continually be coveted and polished. Such
a joy to read.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

6 posted 2004-07-03 03:13 PM

I enjoyed the thoughtfulness of this and the ideas it posed for consideration.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2004-07-03 03:39 PM

Thank you all so very much for reading and for the kind comments. I'm somewhat surprised but pleasantly so. Thanks!

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