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Busy with my own cheek and thunder
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Busy with my own cheek and thunder |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Doves give me joy the silly simple songs of them until busy with my own cheek and thunder cages thought to protect now starve and there’s innocence in trying to escape into the wild air to nourish or to die Is there an order to importance Distress flies around me and touches my shoulder with a sharp claw until I focus and bleed enough to see I love birds They have forgotten Forgiven the hunger now it’s filled they say this with their steady red eyes and I wonder how many cages I have made and then neglected with my own cheek and blunder |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Such a sad sound to this... but they will forgive... I do know the feel of this, however, as we left for six days, and my squirrels and rabbits all lost weight... do we hinder, feeding nature? or simply strive to be part of a more peaceful order? ah sweetie...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah yes! A wise one you are...and lawdy lawdy that title? laughing now check your e mail in a few, k? Hugs, wise poet woman. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
None, now.... at least none that I can see. Watching you work is a joy to me, because I know I am watching poetry write itself. Thank you for the privilege, dear lady. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie A delight to read. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
The creatures forgive. Much growth here, Grasshopper. *smile* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Delightful, Martie!!!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, yes...... Enjoyed.......jo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah the creatures give unconditional love sweet Martie... they forgive easily. Excellent write. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie, this is yet another of your poetry that crosses a couple of lines of meaning in my perception. Excellent as always. Hoping you are well.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I love birds They have forgotten Forgiven the hunger now it’s filled they say this with their steady red eyes" Perhaps it's a matter of neccesity, the forgetting. How else would they continue to sing? Sometimes, your writing is so raw, Martie, that the sensation of it nearly burns. This is one of those times... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
This speaks volumes, Martie... and I hear you... Love you, my friend... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I agree with Magnus, there is more than one way to read this. Excellent.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love birds too, except at 6 in the morning when they are singing at my window and I've just laid down at 4 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and I wonder how many cages I have made and then neglected with my own cheek and blunder ============================ oh my....you write mirrors on my heart... how timely this piece is to me.... my blunders came in the way of furry friends rather than feathers...but the reality is heart breaking never the less. I understand this write and feel every word...Ive learned another lesson the hard way.  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - how well you write that no matter what has taken over our lives and no matter how weighty or important there are others things and beings dependent on us...not all of us can so truthfully remark on our experiences as you do - thanks helps me remember there are lots of things I must be a part of even if something else seems to be claiming my time - so very well done - Paul |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Self regret is the most puzzling of emotions, especially when the occasion for reparation is past. This is a beautiful story. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your first lines touched me immediately... for a pair of doves has been using one of my hanging baskets as a nest for many years... if it isn't the same pair, word got around where the softie lives. *G* I've enjoyed both their cooing and their bickering... and the wobbly first flights of their offspring... but one was dead on my patio earlier this week... apparently attacked by a crow. Whatever the cages or neglect... love is an endless fount of forgiveness... and as long as there is life, amends are possible. *S* Beautiful, thoughtful write! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Gosh, you're brilliant Martie. it's a keeper. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah but there is a price for freedom as well...we had a dove once, that we were taking care of until it could fly again, and I hated for it to be caged, so we let it roam the beams of the porch...until one morning when all we found was a few stray feathers... cats...sigh...the sky is made for those that fly...we... can only dream.. nice write martie |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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