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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2004-07-01 09:42 PM

Flashes illuminate hidden clouds darkened by the
swell of rains aching to plummet earthward.

Distance hushes the unheard clap, uncounted
miles await the slightest reverberation...quiet
stills the trees, leaves turned skyward, mouths
open, thirsting.

A sudden signaling gust swirls leaves against
the fence.  Huddling birds brace in anticipation of the
humid forces of nature.   On darkened wings,
the muted messenger stealthily soars.

A storm brews beyond the edge of earth as
darkness gives way to a panorama of electricity...
blinking the eye, so captivating, yet chilling,
humbling.

Soon, yes....very soon the thirst of the land shall
be quenched and morning shall bring once again
the calm of a waking day as dew trickles from the
pointed ends of soft grasses and birds watch
in anticipation of a tasty meal, squirming to be
free, to till the soils once again.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2004-07-01 09:51 PM

A storm brews beyond the edge of earth as
darkness gives way to a panorama of electricity...
blinking the eye, so captivating, yet chilling,
humbling.

Ooh, we had one of these beauties just the other day. Great write Magnus my friend.
hugs, Chris

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

2 posted 2004-07-01 09:57 PM

excellent!!!

What a description of Mother nature at her finest!!!!

Great reading...I really enjoyed....and that does not happen too often with me.

Robert

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-07-01 09:58 PM

"Soon, yes....very soon the thirst of the land shall
be quenched and morning shall bring once again
the calm of a waking day as dew trickles from the
pointed ends of soft grasses and birds watch
in anticipation of a tasty meal, squirming to be
free, to till the soils once again."

Excellent write sir...
could feel the electricity of the storm in the air...and then the quietness later.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-07-01 11:06 PM

Barry...I love storms...now I know why....you just made me miss them with this very real feel of your poem. Thanks! Hugs!

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-07-01 11:26 PM

You captured the essence of a storm so well that I felt a shiver in anticipation. I love storms and you've delivered a fine one.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-07-01 11:35 PM

The thunder, the lightning, the deluge and the peace...
Such electric rhythms...nature made.
Exceptional!!
TD

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2004-07-01 11:42 PM

yes perfect !!!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2004-07-02 12:13 PM

Seriously, one of the most enjoyable descriptions of a storm and aftermath I've ever had the pleasure of reading!

....jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-07-02 01:37 PM

you took me there...and so I'll keep this for when I'm dry and need to go again

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