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Legacy of Touch (duet with Gentle Spirit)
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Legacy of Touch (duet with Gentle Spirit) |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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(*a muted and Gentle Spirit production*)  Legacy of Touch `````````````````` Countless years have passed through fingers one grain of memory at a time moments are falling sands overflowing from grasping hands those that held the touch of a child to a mother's scented embrace perfumed palms that have held the heavy weight from her husband's shoulders so his calloused fingertips could savour the rosy plump of his infant's cheeks leaving fingerprint impressions of love that kisses the world away. a sensation that lingers through generations Cherished hearts safely resting in a finger's breadth of remembrance. Recollections of love bound to babe swathed in family’s embrace, reaching into golden years awakening echo’s voice, sweet sounds of laughter drifting through the passages of time. Scenes roll, frame by frame images capturing moments, of life each a jewel treasured in mind. From the moment of birth growing, proceeding to that of a man, forever of strength held to a wife's bosom, crying together as their child sets out in life, ready to fly... ready to try. Hands holding on tenderly with fingers stretched out slowly letting go, knowing that this bond of love is held forever on the edges of eternity. |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
 awsome piece of writing ... not sure who did what bit but it got me going ... such imagery in my mind .. was wonderful to read and enjoy. It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Recollections of love bound to babe swathed in family’s embrace, reaching into golden years awakening echo’s voice, sweet sounds of laughter drifting through the passages of time. Scenes roll, frame by frame images capturing moments, of life each a jewel treasured in mind. From the moment of birth growing, proceeding to that of a man, forever of strength held to a wife's bosom, crying together as their child sets out in life, ready to fly... ready to try. Goodness you two, this is ever precious....the whole thing and the above lines? are my favourite. You must duet again. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice... very nice indeed.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now, this. This is wonderful. You have taken simplicity of love for family and underscored it with both sensitivity and compassion. A beautiful writing...a wonderful duet. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
There was not one line in here that was better then the other, each and every word fit and was beautifully designed, softly, gently, the images became alive....how lovely you write. Wishing you a great weekend ahead! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Mocking the comments above, you two have done a beautiful thing here...glad I was able to catch it. jimmy |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used.. may I just add.... Brava! To two of Passions finest writers! Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well done you two!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you blend together so very well beautifully done |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Scenes roll, frame by frame images capturing moments, of life each a jewel treasured in mind. From the moment of birth growing, proceeding to that of a man, forever of strength held to a wife's bosom, crying together as their child sets out in life, ready to fly... ready to try." You two created a lovely write together. Feel like I was watching the movie.  .......jo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I wanted to thank everyone for the kindness of your words. It is so much appreciated. Dawn~thank you so very much for the blending of our words resulting in a duet that I am very very proud of. It was a joy writing with you! It's better than I could have planned.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Solid, seamless and bittersweet. But this... "ready to fly... ready to try." Is the part that I come back too. Good job Ladypoetwomen! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Seamless is a perfect description for this lovely write...where I can enjoy two of my favorite authors...together. TD |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Thank you everyone and Donna, thats all you up there..ALL YOU. I think you did beautifully...more than beautifully |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ed, Td, thank you both very much! aww Dawn your so precious, thank you. [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-02-2004 11:31 AM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Scenes roll, frame by frame images capturing moments, of life each a jewel treasured in mind. Ladies, ladies, this is truly a treasure that overflows with a very special kind of love. Absolutely gorgeous you two~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Bluesy, thanks so much for the slide by and kind words. Hugs to you. Dawn, again thank YOU for the pleasure! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed to both of you ARCTIC WIND |
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