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Daddys Girl
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Daddys Girl |
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UniqueFreak Member
since 2004-01-09
Posts 62Scotland 
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I'm not "Daddy's Girl" anymore. I am grown, I am a woman, I can drive, I have my own car. I am not daddys little girl, I dont wear my hair in pigtails or cute little bunches. I dont cry for him to tuck me in at night or to scare away the ghosts from under my bed. I'm not daddys girl because I dont need him now, I am big, indepedant. I shave my legs and cook my own dinner. I'm not daddys little girl, cuz daddy has gone. now im just a little girl. I think this was the first ever poem i wrote after my great grandpa died, i used my mums reaction to write it. Its pretty...awful..lol...but thought id post it up here to see how it compares with my more recent work. Stephi |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I think it gets the point across.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The only critique I can give you is to hone up on your spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc. Other than that, I am sure there are several "daddy's girls" in here that can relate to this plucking of heartstrings... I enjoyed it very much. Thank you. |
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UniqueFreak Member
since 2004-01-09
Posts 62Scotland |
lol! Well I came across this the other day, in a little diary I used to write in...it's from about 5 years ago, so I would have been around 13 at the time. I just typed it in exactly the way it was on the paper, so yeah I understand that the grammar etc is poor, but thought id keep it as is to try reinforce idea of 'little girl'...hmm...bad idea?? lol but thanks for input so far! its always welcomed, good or bad.Stephi |
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