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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Printed The words seem little but stains Crooked lines in rows arranged To some meaning or intend Now accusing me Now refusing me The original feeling Captured then So I clean the drive Erasing all that was stored in some Cryptic binary horde of ego After I have transferred all to white Sheets.. And sheets again And I wonder… How would they float on the wind And would if someone paused to pick one up Read the lines Understand? Or would fire be the better end That with flickered heat of flame Consume the very words Erase them into ash No more to begin? It is vanity To assume merit where there is none Or ignorance of truth in denial Yet…. Human we remain And our faults find no cure in understand of why So perhaps it is organic To decompose these words One small worm at a time Eating bits of prose Or edge of rhyme For then at least when all is done The flowers I cut and put in vase contain Some essence of the you Written in each refrain |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Don't you do it!!! You keep every word and someday read and smile. I know that is what I do from time to time with a certain binder.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
So I clean the drive Erasing all that was stored in some Cryptic binary horde of ego After I have transferred all to white heartfelt my friend, tugs at the heart strings, sending hugs |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Still enjoying this....yep.... very much so. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
It is vanity To assume merit where there is none Or ignorance of truth in denial Yet…. Human we remain And our faults find no cure in understand of why wow, this is so deep and true to the heart and thought-provoking. you seem to get better and better with each write. i like! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "And I wonder… How would they float on the wind And would if someone paused to pick one up Read the lines Understand?" I'll be looking for a floating paper in the air, floating down like a feather...I'd love that and I think I'd understand.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
So perhaps it is organic To decompose these words One small worm at a time Eating bits of prose Or edge of rhyme For then at least when all is done The flowers I cut and put in vase contain Some essence of the you Written in each refrain Sir Ron? thank you for blowing me away. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"So perhaps it is organic To decompose these words One small worm at a time Eating bits of prose Or edge of rhyme For then at least when all is done The flowers I cut and put in vase contain Some essence of the you Written in each refrain" I'm absolutely loving this poem! ...jo |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I understand |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I learned the hard way to save your work IMMEDIATELY--knowing that you--um, like ME--have impulses to trash it all. (somehow I know that doesn't reassure you) but we can't assume to know the impact our words will have on others-- all I know is that there are days when you have summed things up for me and given me inspiration to just STAND still and be. So don't question it, lovie. Just let it be. paper airplanes, and messages in bottles...might seem like nothing to US, but end up a miracle to others. Hugs you. and yes, miss you. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Well said. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yep, what Ser said. BTW, can I take the trash can out for you?  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Cleanin' out the old hard drive are ya? Well, don't throw this away... "It is vanity To assume merit where there is none Or ignorance of truth in denial Yet…. Human we remain And our faults find no cure in understand of why" I just might make it my new "critique messege" LOL (and the river is treating me VERY well..low, slow and green. Nice smallmouth too!) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I loved Now accusing me Now refusing me Hope all is well with you! Corinne |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write m'friend....well done indeed. hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
... sigh ... There's a place I like to hide-open your mind to me-Visualise your dream- Record it in the present tense, I am smiling next to you, in silent lucidity |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Ron, don't you ever get tired of writing such good schtuff? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL organic is good now, about that trash can...... |
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