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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

0 posted 2004-06-29 10:45 AM

When I Depart

when I depart
someday
some
day

before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever

do me this
parting
gift
your eyes
in my last
moments

look
into me
again
touch spirit
let your
eyes

as close as
this
close as
love
whisper
into me
as they do
now

let them be
the last
thing
I will
see

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-06-29 10:47 AM

look
into me
again
touch spirit
let your
eyes

...

whisper
into me
as they do
now

...

Bravo, Sir...Bravo...

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2004-06-29 10:50 AM

Ed

A passionate plea and beautiful as a sigh, but oh so sad.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

3 posted 2004-06-29 11:26 AM

smiling at you... don't go anywhere-ya hear?
miscellanea

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2004-06-29 11:28 AM

& a big thumbs up marvelous writing with such powerful emotions...beautifully done.

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

5 posted 2004-06-29 11:32 AM

"before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever"

Your forever is beautiful...but I hope the eyes keep you grounded for a long and happy life.

Sincerely,
Reg

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-06-29 12:31 PM

very touching

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2004-06-29 02:39 PM

before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever

Even as my eyes fill with tears, they blink with amazement and appreciation for your incredible images. *S*

This is one of your best, my friend... more... it's one of THE best I've ever read. *S* Poems just don't get more loving... or lovely. *S*

But if you can delay that departure another 60-70 years or so... I'm sure many of us would be grateful??? *G*

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2004-06-29 05:29 PM

That would be a look worth waiting for, I'm sure.........beautiful poem, RATL!

.....jo

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

9 posted 2004-06-29 07:00 PM

This is sorrowful to me, for it makes me think of looking into my mother's eyes as she faded and was lost to me.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2004-06-29 07:49 PM

my my, this is a beauty...indeed indeed..
a true soul mate poem.
very very lovely poet sir.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2004-06-29 07:51 PM

very nice
but class has not been dismissed yet
so you can't go anywhere

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

12 posted 2007-10-13 12:42 PM

When it is my turn to depart this lovely life, I hope to have someone take the time to rock me in a big 'ole rocking chair and lull me to sleep. That would be leaving this world as I came, knowing the love that kept me. enjoyed, "late"

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